Open Poetry #13 |
Rare Moments |
Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
I relax into the easy banter that we so rarely share Completely me Completely you Voices rising and falling lightly playfully skipping and spinning with no effort or distance between our thoughts and hearts And it matters not in this moment that we're falling apart More that in this instant So rare It's easy to see why we once loved
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well put. Well written. Not easy thoughts to pen. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Time is nothing but a stream of "instants". And it swirls. You can step into it at any point....and start again. Bob |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Beautifully sad... "Completely me Completely you" so nice. |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Thank you so much, Interloper! Yes, was a little difficult to write, but helpful, I think. RMW - I shall ponder this.....*smiling* I thank you for the comment. PoeticKnight - Thank you...it was a sad write.
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Well written, what a beautiful poem. This is lovely and tells of the wonders of life, or maybe that life once had but you will never forget. Interesting, intriguing and inspiring! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I've really enjoyed reading this. It's so hard to remember the good things that once was when a relationship falls apart. excellent work! -Tier Ps, I think you should change "Just A Woman" to "THE WOMAN" *Chuckles* |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Boy, do I know moments like this...but I never could've captured them with such excellence! Have I mentioned lately that I love the way you write? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Bittersweet, and familiar...very well done. ~*~ If the want a rainbow ~ you have to put up with a little rain ~*~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I know exactly how this is. . . excellent writing. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
"and it matters not..." So aptly put into words. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
wow i liked this, "how we once" Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Isn't it funny how it shows itself at the strangest times?? I really liked this, well done. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Ahh..yes. I recognize such moments. How to keep them though? I love this. |
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