Mike's (bsquirrel's) challenge: tired dribblings

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Mike's (bsquirrel's) challenge: tired dribblings

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2002-09-25 10:19 AM

if I beg of you,
would you please spray me
with endless showers
defrosted from those
frigid icicles

it’s the only chance
that I might have left
to drown my torment
and drink it in gulps

my head is throbbing
with feelings of guilt
and screams of silence
like wild howling wolves
barking at the moon

my arms are spread wide
apart in implore
and am on my knees:
bless my misery
and throw me a rope
so I could hang on
to fresh lease of life;
throw me a shower
so I could come out
cleansed pristinely new

and till you rain down
dark clouds shall remain
and my muse shall scribe
scores of tired dribblings
from a cracked pencil

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (09-25-2002 10:22 AM).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

1 posted 2002-09-25 01:05 PM

You paint despair and longing with a beautiful force here, Sudhir. I loved this. Thanks for taking my challenge.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2002-09-26 07:38 AM

what Mike said....

I always enjoy your take on not only a challenge but on any subject..

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

3 posted 2002-09-26 11:43 AM

Thanks a lot guys

It was fun...

regards,
sudhir

eor
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since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

4 posted 2002-09-27 03:46 AM

i enjoyed this very much...eor

Krishankins

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since 2002-06-23

Posts 972
Texas

5 posted 2002-09-27 05:31 PM

SHEW!!!!!!
I am enthralled with the way you took that line and came up with this wonderful piece, Sudhir!! Nicely done!

Enjoyed immensely!!!!!

Kris

Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!?

Poet deVine

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6 posted 2002-09-27 11:22 PM

Challenge very well met!

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

7 posted 2002-09-30 03:59 AM

Thank you all so very much, eor, Kris, PdV...

Regards to all of you,
Sudhir

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