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Silent_nights
New Member

since 2002-09-16

Posts 6
Dreamland,WI

0 posted 2002-09-23 06:28 PM

Mirror Thoughts

I look up,
At the star filld sky,
Wondering if my life is a lie.

Praying to God,
For the answers i need,
To find when I look for,
My way home before i die.

Trying to find out,
If I should die,
Looking up to the heavens,
For the answers I need to survive.

Waiting for the answers,
That God will show,
Praying each night,
So I dont go.

I close my eyes,
One last time,
Praying to God to help me,
This one last time.

Not wanting to die,
I hold my knife close,
Praying to God for the courage,
Not to end my life.

I take the knife,
One last time,
Putting it to my throat,
Wondering if I'll die.

Crying as I push the blade,
Feeling my skin break,
While the blood runs wild,
I pray to God,
For what I have done,
Asking him for forgivness,
Because I am done.

I take my last breaths,
And wipe away my tears,
My last few words where,
God please let me die.

I see a shadow out,
Of the corner of my eyes,
That I thought was a ghost,
Comeing after my life.

Finding out it was my friend,
Crying by my side,
Praying to God,
Please dont let her die.

I gasp for more breaths,
And whispered in her ear,
Im sorry,
I love you,
And please dont let me die.

We look into each others eyes,
As I gasp for air,
To try to stay alive.

We share mirror thoughts,
Without saying a word,
We both knew I wasnt,
Going to make it through.

The thoughts that ran,
Through our minds,
Were the thoughts of God,
Telling us im not gunna die.

Hearing the sirens in the distance,
Getting closer and closer,
I grasp her hand tight,
Praying to God,
Please dont let me die.

The sirens stopped,
And there was a knock on the door,
My friend gets up,
And runs to the door,
Hurry she cries,
I think shes gunna die.

A peramedic runs in,
And sees me laying there,
I see the fear in her eyes,
When she said,
Shes gunna die.

I grabbed my friends hand,
Gasping for air,
She could see the fear in me,
And knew I was giving in.

by: Sara

Sorry this is so long, dont know if I should cut some or not.. What do u guys/gals think? Thanks

D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

1 posted 2002-09-23 10:41 PM

Wow....that was incredible....The pain in this piece makes me afraid to ask: Personal experience?

Regardless, I found this piece to be incredibly touching and thought-provoking. Excellent!

"cherry blossoms"

Floating to the ground
Light pink in your soft colour
End my memories

Silent_nights
New Member

since 2002-09-16

Posts 6
Dreamland,WI

2 posted 2002-09-24 12:24 PM

Its how I feel deep down inside...
im thinking bout doing it, but not that way i guess..
Maybe too scared, or I just dont want to leave me friends..
I promised not to leave a friend of mine.. So I guess im still here,
and I dont know why.. I see u live in WI, So do I... So borning here...

Sorry... cant help myself.. I have been breaking down at school every day school has started. life is falling apart worse this yr... thanks for the comment...
Maybe talk to u again

~Sarah~

Chameleon
Member

since 2002-08-07

Posts 99
Australia

3 posted 2002-09-27 09:48 AM

Wow.
Intense.
I like, the length does it justice the way it comes to a perfect climax where anything could happen.

Eden
New Member

since 2002-09-28

Posts 5

4 posted 2002-09-28 09:27 PM

I agree with Chamelon and think the length is fine, and it certainly has that climax feel to it.I think the last two lines finnish it perfectly...

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

5 posted 2002-09-29 12:21 PM

I must say that this is a very emotionally vivid poem. It is almost nostalgic in a dark way. I have had suicidal thoughts of this nature as well[assuming the
I look up,
At the star filld sky,
Wondering if my life is a lie.

Praying to God,
For the answers i need,
To find when I look for,
My way home before i die.

is a representation of teenage existential angst. In fact I used to post this type of poem here regularly, but not quite as good as this, I think.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Silent_nights
New Member

since 2002-09-16

Posts 6
Dreamland,WI

6 posted 2002-09-30 11:47 AM

Thanks, lately this is how I've been feeling and resorting to cutting again.
Thanks Fractal007 for your insight im glad you like it.. Most of my friends do too.. Thanks again

~Sara~

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