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Raven Skye
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0 posted 2001-06-06 08:39 PM


So Coby Dick of Papa Roach and his song "Tightrope" have given me the inspiration to write this today. The repetition is well.... repetitious.. hehe

Sometimes I feel
like I'm pushed to the edge,
that I can't move any further.
I'm so afraid of falling.

Sometimes I feel
like I have no friends
that they all dislike me.
I'm so afraid of empathy.

Sometimes I feel
like I'll end up like "him"
that I'll just end it all.
I'm so afraid of closure.

Sometimes I feel
like I have no control
that I can't handle all of this
I'm so afraid of losing.

Sometimes I feel
like "he" doesn't love me
as much as "he" should.
I'm so afraid of being lonely.

Sometimes I feel
like I'm the only one
that ever has problems.
I'm so afraid of getting help.

Sometimes I feel
like a new day will come
that I'll be able to stand.
But I'm so afraid to love myself.

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
"Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold

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1 posted 2001-06-06 09:07 PM


ooh i mos def like this one. i like the repititon it goes with the overall message type thing of the poem     LOL it goes with the mood... there we go lol  well good job. and i like your signature!! hehehe  

Valerie

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2 posted 2001-06-06 09:12 PM


I really really REALLY liked this poem...you out did yourself. It was simply amazing...LOved it!  
Raven Skye
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3 posted 2001-06-07 07:39 PM


hehe thanks for the comments. I didn't like this poem at first but it grew on me. Thanks though!!

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
"Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold

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4 posted 2001-06-07 11:39 PM


aww such an amazing poem!  i know how you feel!

Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that

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5 posted 2001-06-08 12:24 PM


awesome discription of these feelings...i relate to it!...enjoyed greatly...bye

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anonymousfemale
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6 posted 2001-06-09 02:21 AM


Firstly, thankyou for sharing such a great piece. The feelings here are so raw that you have no choice but to connect with them in some way.

Secondly, the repition was a nice touch. It really emphasised what you are feeling instead of what you are just thinking. There is a difference in these two things that not many can catch onto.

Well done on this. It truly is excellent.

~AF~

Just because I hear voices doesn't mean I'm crazy...SHUT UP IN THERE!!!

katherine
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7 posted 2001-06-09 07:11 AM


i love this poem. it's so good.
I can relate too.
well done

fate can only take you so far, the rest is up to you

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8 posted 2001-06-09 03:20 PM


wow..i love this alot, and i loooove papa roach too!!!  this was awsome..you did out do yourself!!!

i wanted to kill the sexiest person alive, but then i realized suicide is a crime!! :)

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9 posted 2001-06-10 01:41 AM


I really liked this poem a lot Raven. I thought you did exceptionally well on this.
Why did you quote "he"? Are you not sure this is a man yer talkin about?  

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Raven Skye
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10 posted 2001-06-10 10:15 AM


Aww...thanks everyone for the comments once again. They are really appreciated.

Oh and Dopey here's the answer to you question:

Well "he" is my best friend Jimmy. He's extremely suicidal and I'm one of his closest friends. Jimmy just doesn't show that he cares. There was a point in my life when I was ready to end it and he wasn't there, but then when he attempted suicide and failed, I was the one on the phone with him for 5 hours telling him it would be okay. I added quotations just to add emphasis.

Have a nice day everyone..

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
"Can't explain the way that I feel. You are the love I never found." -Cold

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