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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne 
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
lol! *APPLAUSE! what a beautiful piece heh.. and it serves the bird right.. great job on this one! "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Why did you do that? The bird was helping you as you said that's not nice  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hahaha... great job, hon! I love it! You rule! Yeah! And Acire, I doubt this actually happened. It's a joke. Get it? Not serious. And a poet is the master of his own poem, so she had every right to put that spin on it at the end. The fact that you didn't enjoy this doesn't make her wrong in any way. Great poem, Sarah! -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OMG! YOU DEMON YOU! hahaha........the poem was really good. I liked it tons.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I'm having a hard time of thinking what to type because I'm in such shock from that ending. That was totally unexpected, I give you so much credit for surprising me like that, even if it was about a mean thing to do, killing that bird  I was hoping the poem would have a really good ending because it was going along great, and wow, I just wasn't expecting that at all! Wow."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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princess^sarah Member
since 2001-01-12
Posts 131melbourne |
god stop it your making me wanna bring that birdy back its head and glue it back on I FEEL SO BAD IM SORRY BIRDIE IM SO SORRY!!! muhahhahah > |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Haha, I love your reply "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
nah don't glue it on, serves him right to wake you up. if anyone did that to me i'd shut the window on their wittle head too!!! LOL good job, don't listen to the people who say that was wrong to write that. they don't know great humor when they read it :> ~Valerie~ *...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
OH MY GOSH! LOL! this is so funny. Thank you so much. I have had a really bad day and this really helped. i take it your not a morning person???  |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
I would just like to take the time to express to all of you my real life response to this...there was an "ouch" followed by a long duration of unstoppable laughter. You guys need to lighten up it's just writing, it's not like she actually did that..I hope...anyways time for less sleep and moe coffe so I'm off. Again great poem >¶Øʆ< |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I don't think anyone took this seriously. I didn't at least. And no one was saying it was bad to write about this, just that it might be considered mean by some poeple if someone actually did this. Writing about it's great though "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This made Lakewalker's top ten in the "favourite poets" thread in PiP lounge. ... she's so proud of herself now. I didn't even get mentioned on his list!  Well I think all the people of Teen #4 should see this! haha... it's just plain brilliant, I felt like pulling it up again. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is a great poem... VERY well written. An oldie, but a goodie --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Allan, you have my sincerist apology for my oversight in leaving you off my list there. I believe I did mention that those were just some of my favorites. Someday I'll make it up to you. someday. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
hah... don't worry about it! Didn't mean to sound like I was whining...  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I know, you were just being you. (I'll let you perceive that as you choose ) Still, I'll find some way of tortur, er, honoring you. Just you wait and see. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
*bump*page one as i liked this one before.. and i still like the humor in ths poem this is a great poem..definitly a "oldie but goodie"  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 04-30-2001).] |
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