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>>>>War Preordained<<<<

Virgil
Junior Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-18 10:32 PM

War Preordained

There are times of peace where all is good,
War nonexistent, people act as they should.
And among these acts, people share with compassion;
Lend all that they have; are diplomatic in action.

Yet all human nature gives way to greed,
And advantage is taken over people in need.
Betrayal begins, and so treachery commences;
Crimes are commited; justice comes to quench it.

Rebellions arise, commotion and mutiny break out;
Countries make claims, such to leave divinity in doubt.
Bomb threats and sanctions, political speeches to bore-
And before anyone knows it, they're fighting a war.

So with every outbreak of peace, a war is subsequent;
No amity exists without conflict to show for it.
Violence is imminent, the truth hard to swallow,
Yet silver lining subsists! With every war...peace will follow.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-01-18 10:51 PM

"Love like greed fades. I'm looking for something more exciting"- Secret

Nice one here!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-01-19 10:08 AM

I like the way you said "Outbreak of Peace." Made it seem like peace is some kind of positive plague for the people. (argh, too many P's)
Nice poem, Virgil. Keep 'em coming.
-Allan

"Allan, don't ever be afraid to disappoint me" -Amanda (the most meaningful thing that has ever been said to me)

Salooma
Senior Member

since 2000-01-28

Posts 781

3 posted 2001-01-19 10:10 AM

Very nice poem! I gotta complement you on the great structure and form of this. I loved it! Loved the subject as well!

Salma

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2001-01-19 01:38 PM

Yes, this does have great form, and I agree with what it says too. I'm really impressed by this one, wonderful job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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