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Soon Love's Music
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Soon Love's Music |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Soon Love's Music in the sky heavens, far away distant, aloft hands float and touch and meld, sweet, soft keys of cream ivory, keys of ebony, too music of piano floats, soft, supple, new… ~*~ how does the musician imagine a tune how does a soloist know when to croon perhaps, in the sortilege of a summer day that comes one instant ahead of soon… ~*~ to hold that twinkling in a concerto's tone or to grasp with emphasis impetus' own as to know a love in the nucleus of a noon when that day comes just ahead of soon… ~*~ and whether in this sheer, a mystical quality that dwells under the sun, in the heart of me that, if confessed in one word of poetry would bring you then ahead of soon to me… ~*~ for I perceive you in cream of ivories as you fathom to possess the key of me as the pass to poetry should in all reality be delicate as the love you bring soon to we… ~*~ 01.14.01 |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
truly I could quote the entire text - but the summation: "the pass to poetry should in all reality be delicate as the love you bring soon to we" shall suffice as it truly does sum up a georgous poem! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
 Sunshine--I love this, mellifluous and soft. Beaufiful write. Poeminister "I drank at every vine The last was like the first I came upon no wine So wonderful as the thirst" ~Millay [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 01-15-2001).] |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Sunshine, So beautifully flowing. A lovely gathering of imagery... Elise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and whether in this sheer, a mystical quality that dwells under the sun, in the heart of me that, if confessed in one word of poetry would bring you then ahead of soon to me… ================== for I perceive you in cream of ivories as you fathom to possess the key of me as the pass to poetry should in all reality be delicate as the love you bring soon to we… =================== well this tickles me ivories for sure.. what a very cool write... very cool use of metaphor to express the love, the music and the poetry... and the love of all three. those above verses are poetic perfection love this one Sun..way cool  jm baby can I hold you tonite ... maybe if I said the right words, at the right time ... you'd be mine. baby can I hold you tonite. ~tracy chapman~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, truly wonderful love, utterly beautiful, singing in accents clear and strong. I really love this one as much if not more than the others. You have the magic touch dear heart. Absolutely delightful. Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
What a beautiful choice of words, I liked it a lot. Cathy |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
...bump... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
for I perceive you in cream of ivories as you fathom to possess the key of me as the pass to poetry should in all reality be delicate as the love you bring soon to we ============================ You have penned one of pure beauty and perfection , especially the above verse. I truely enjoyed this one very very much. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
All I can do is agree with the rest. This is spectacular in it's beauty. Sandra |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wow, this was so beautifully written...my mind felt like it was actually floating in heavy on clouds....excellent write, Sunshine! Nathan |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
This was incredible. Thanks for the read. ~Susie "Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?" ~Cinderella |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
" I perceive you in the cream of ivories..." for some reason that line really hums loudly....as does the entire poem. Nicely done, sunshine  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mr. Yeats...your summation pleases me, case dismissed!... Poeminister...mellifluous suits this piece, and I thank you for sharing those thoughts... Thank you Athena... JM...you for one always appreciate metaphor..thank you... and where was the French accent, Marsha? Thank you mon cher... Cathy, thank you so much for taking time to read... Poeminister - I felt that bump! Thank you!... Mark, those are very special words coming from you...thank you so much for taking the time to read, and to comment... Cat, apparently you stand with quite an awesome group of poets...thank you... Nate, thank you so much for telling me how you felt after reading this...that is always important to know... Susie, you are quite welcome, thank you... 'Deer...so like you to hear one hum...I've been humming all day...thank you so much for reading... |
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