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First Dance Of Second Chance
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First Dance Of Second Chance |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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 First Dance Of Second Chance The room was filled with swirling masses of song cluttered with the chatter of a thousand voices all clamoring to be heard above the notes of beauty. This did not distract him as his eyes fixed themselves in a trance upon the brunette swirls of her glistening hair. Her eyes lit up the room in the wonder of a searching heart as if seeing for the first time a life apart from what she had become so familiar with. The brilliant lights were rebounding off the juke box in the corner where the echoes of the bass were flooding the very atmosphere where she drew her next breath. Her lips were frozen in the weakened smile as all her friends joined others on the dance floor to give their feet a chance to mingle among the heavy steps of partners. Never once did she notice him slowly fighting his way through the crowd ... his determined walk tossing aside the glances of strangers stumbling onto his quested path. His eyes fixed to their stare as he hoped he would not be too late at arriving in front of her table to tip his hat and softly hold out his hand as he spoke ... "Pardon me miss ... may I have this dance?" Her eyes followed up the long trail where leather boots quickly turned to denim hugging the colorful fabric of vision with a brief pause around the golden glimmer of metal and then flowing up to the hopeful smile of nervousness resting beneath the up-turn of his hat as he awaited her answer. She did not speak, but simply let her eyes pierce deep into his soul as she reached out her hand and joined it with his in a tightened grip as if to say "Why yes, please ... and may the song never end." We became shadows in the night and the world disappeared Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-05-2001).] |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Mark-This was breathtaking. Could I have the third dance? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well Gemini has started the line...4th, please? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I loved it. When the dance is over if you're not too tired come on over to Miss Kitty's the bar is still open!!!!!!! "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* may I join the line please for a very long slow one, if I may? Oh gosh, I haven't felt such a sense of sweetness from a poem in a very long time. Thank you so very much. Much love and hugs to you from me. Lucky lady you will have in your arms, my friend. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://www.voy.com/7622/ http://www.powerpoems.com |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Very nice. What a beautiful story you pen. Dancing, swirling, shadows that disappear in the night... away from the eyes of the world. Nice picture you paint. Deb |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark my friend, what's that line dance away the heartache dance away the pain, well if it helps I'll do that. (I think it was Roxy Music, but I'm not sure!) Wonderful as always truly wonderful. But I think I'll wait for a dance near the end if you don't mind. Truly another one of your beauties. Take care Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She did not speak, but simply let her eyes pierce deep into his soul as she reached out her hand and joined it with his in a tightened grip as if to say "Why yes, please ... and may the song never end." We became shadows in the night and the world disappeared =================== Way Cool MC... the music on this is a definate GROOVY ... I hope all have their speakers on and get to enjoy the special effect treat. as for getting in line for a dance.... well, since I know your dance card is spoken for ... and its a never ending song ... I'll just sit back and enjoy watching you "trip the lite fantastic." excellent imagery here...you wrote it so I could see it happening. and your looking good in that Stetson, cowboy  like I said .. Groovy me |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
first dance of second chance in the shadows of romance.. i loved the images mark..beautifully done ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 That short walk must have felt like a thousand miles though the honky-tonk and her hand was definitely beyond a thousand words ever spoken. Lucky to get there in time? I think not.... I knoooow she was waiting. Bob <>< |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
oh how i love this....i could see the whole story in my mind..as if..i were actually there... beautifully written cowboy mark!! love it! will have to save this one in my little bit of a library if you dont mind  hugs, g "sometimes a closed door provides us with walls to lean on....." -kathleen vibbert |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey Mark--where you been hanging out?...sounds like you might have found a place in the heart...and lovely free verse of a dance here...makes me want to two step..hugs! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
mark~ this is so beautiful...full of your usual grace. this is wonderfully written full of love much. the special sound effects add that special touch. but mark the work itself here is simply breathtaking! so glad i didn't miss this one..take care. ~amy~ ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Such perfectly romantic musings, Mark. I am in the line with the rest of the women here, for that next dance.. Loved this. You outdid yourself once again. Sandra |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Mark, Let's dance shall we? Now this is poetry! though western is the type of dance it smacks of ballroom, soft romance with cowboy hat, or suit of armour in this write you are the charmer Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Gemini-Thank you much. I am glad that you found it breathtaking. Karilea-Thank you my friend. I take it you liked the poem. Kathleen-Thank you much and I will visit Miss Kitty's soon. Karen-It is I who am blessed and lucky to have found her in my arms for our dance. Thank you much my friend. Deb-It was and still is more than just a nice picture SHE has painted on my heart through her friendship. Thank you so much my dear friend. I am glad you liked it. Marsha-Thank you my friend. I hope you find that dance of yours sooner than at the end of any line. JM-Thank you my sweet friend. Yes, the song is a never ending one at that. So you like the Stetson do ya? I do believe it is now officially a part of me. I am glad that the imagery was good enough for you to see the scene happen. That means alot to me. Victoria-Thank you my friend. I am happy that you liked the images. Bob-That is the way I prefer to think of it, but some things you just don't want to leave to chance now do you? My friend, I thank you dearly for your always kind words and inspiration. Gale-For you to put this in your library is a great compliment and I thank you for that and for your wonderful reply. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Martie-Thank you my friend. Hanging out??????????????? Whatever do you mean? Maybe on a cloud or two but never too far away ya know. I am glad you liked my free-verse but it nowhere near the caliber of yours YET!!! Amy-So nice to see you back. I am very happy that you liked the poem and the extra touch of music in it. I hear music all the time these days and I just thought I would share some of it. Thank you much my friend. Sandra-Thank you my friend. Perfect romantic musings you say? Well, that brought a smile to my face. Kethry-Cowboy's do the ballroom dancing real good you know. We don't just know how to two step. That is a myth. We love the closeness of the slow ones alot more than we let on sometimes. Heck, who wouldn't. |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Very fine work, Mark You have the touch it takes to paint a picture with words. nice touch at the end. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mark~ Like WOW!!!! great write my friend, loved the images and the music...fantastic Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A beautiful romantic trip across the room through the crowd up to the brunette...and the end well, it's the way I hoped it would be. The romance of budding love mixed with the love of the romance of life.....you paint wonderful word pictures Mark my friend...as if I didn't know that anyway but I always enjoy them immensely...have a great romantic day and I hope you're still dancing with her! ............................ethome |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice romantic mood you have set here Mark...James |
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Agust P Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 157 |
A great poem and a painting "We became shadows in the night and the world disappeared" I liked this one very much, thank you, AP |
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Beverley Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 97England |
what a lovely dream dance this is. Really love the light this sheds dance on Stone walls do not a prison make Nor iron bars a cage Minds innocent and quiet take That for a hermitage If I have freedom in my love And in my s |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
am I to late....oh no...don't let me come in to late...where is the line....I still hear the music....still see couples on the floor...are you still there for a slow dance with me... hope so (((Hugs)) Charisma |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Here's to a thousand dances of that which you have so vividly portrayed in your words |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
still loving this, cowboy....and...i think i forgot to click my library button..(!) so i had a good excuse to read again  lolhugs, g "sometimes a closed door provides us with walls to lean on....." -kathleen vibbert |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Sensually woven, vividly painted scene! Well done! Captivating! It's been 18 years since I've danced, save for the very awkward time I danced with my daughter at her wedding. I would so love this second chance to dance. Virginia |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Stan-Thank you much. The ending made it in at the last minute on this one. I am glad you liked it. Tracie-Well thank you for that big WOW my friend. I am happy that you enjoyed this one. ethome-I thank you dearly for those wonderful words my friend. I always like it when a reader can see the images I try to convey. That is what makes it so enjoyable to write. Don't worry, my boots are in for the long haul on this dance my friend. James-Coming from the master of romance I am humbled and honored both. Thank you my friend. Agust P-Thank you much and I am glad that you liked the ending as it was her herself that first said part of it and I only reinforced it. Beverley-Thank you kindly. It is nice when certain dreams come true but still have the same wonderful effect on you. Charisma-I have never known you to be late for anything my friend. Thank you so much. hoot_owl_rn-Thank you so much and here is to you finding the dance of your dreams every day. Gale-Thank you my friend. You don't need an excuse to come visit. Virginia-18 years is far too long to go without dancing. I hope you find that floor soon with the one that will make the world disappear with you. Thank you so much. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarkB~ And you know that I'm so pleased to find you enraptured by her charms. Cherish the dance, my friend, as I know you will. The slow ones are the best ones, indeed. May the music of your heart be played over and over again. Beautiful, my friend. Now drop another quarter in the jukebox, Cowboy ... the night is yet young ! Loving that you - are loving the dance - sharing the feelings of that second chance. That belt-buckle glance wasn't lost on me either ! *wink* *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marge-enraptured and more. Thank you my friend and you know I am enjoying the dance especially with the gaze in our eyes and no need for extra quarters.......I have the jukebox rigged to play non-stop. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-06-2001).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Mark, this is one sweet write my friend... I shall be keeping this one need I say anymore... On another note, is there a spot for another on your dance card as one just luves to twirl ya know... Coco |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Coco-Thank you my friend and the fact that you are keeping this one in a great honor to me. For that and your kind reply I am humbled greatly and give you a double dip of thanks. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
"We became shadows in the night and the world disappeared" Mark, this is absolutely how dancing should always be and feel, this swept me away to many beautiful memories.... WOW Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ you took me there, made me want to dance........loved this........I've been so busy this week, and I found this incredible poem of yours.......I was holding my breath, waiting for him to ask........hearing her soul whisper.........yes.......again, you pulled the sigh right from my heart........your words always find my most romantic of hiding places. Thank you for that. - SEA |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Greeneyes-I am very happy that I was able to help you recall some wonderful memories with my words. It is nice to know that there are those that know just how this feels and my wish would be for everyone to know this beautiful warmth. Thank you so much my friend. SEA-It is I who thank you for always making me feel special with your wonderful replies my friend. It makes me happy to know that you enjoyed this and that it reached your romantic emotions. Thank you dearly my friend. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is very beautiful Mark |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Paula-Thank you. It is nice to see you. I am glad you found it beautiful. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Very groooooooooooooooooooooooovy and it's not nice to "one up" the teacher...but in this case I'll let it slide because the music was pretty cool...don't make a habit of showing me up ok!!! It's nice to see you dancing again....dip once for me! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Holly-You knew when you taught me the graphics that I would have to expand a little didn't you. Thank you for you kind words. Nice to see you finding your own happiness. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Mark, I didn't know you played the piano. Your one talented Cowboy... But, I'm not going to ask you for a dance... since your dance card is all full anyway. lol. Very very cool..... I think I need some background music to a sonnet. Hey, or an Irish jig... lets get this place hopping. Parker |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Parker-My friend.......just where the heck ya been hangin? I was just about to call out the Mounties to come a lookin fer ya. Thank you so much for the wonderful reply but ya already know it was a player piano. I had my hands full in the dance and I am not about to let go either. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
In my library. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh wow, oh wow... oh WOW!!!! *S* What romantic perfection! Great picture, beautiful music... you couldn't have chosen better! And words that flow on the page with a dance whose grace is unequaled. Searching eyes find searching heart... and the answer was perfect. I love this one, cowboy! DARN these Baptist feet and their klutziness! LOL [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 03-29-2001).] |
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