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Carbon Copied Plan
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Carbon Copied Plan |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Carbon Copied Plan long ago in the dark of right God wrote out his plan one night He took a sheet of paper white and beneath He laid rice paper thin with carbonated black between and transliterated His thought within There shall be this one man Who will be good by My command He shall be giving of his soul Peace shall be his guiding goal And his loving mate shall be His mirror for all eternity but such is the way of life the original went on, one way the copy beneath, yet another throughout the planes of time they sought the sight of the very other looking to come together yet again the original document, he took some beating the rice paper, tho thin, she shed some greeting each knowing they were a wondrous part of God’s great plan, the plan of heart each looking for the return to see the original match to the carboned copy soul mates fly, at God’s command in eternity, shall walk hand in hand 01.05.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Karilea - Great plot here - I like the way it all links together, and the use of fonts helps to bind it. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
soul mates fly, at God’s command in eternity, shall walk hand in hand Beautifully written, especially loved the last two lines, they spoke to me. It's in your eyes a fire that's wild and glorious Unhibited, unfinished in everything I do Let the morning rise like our hearts desire" whipping boy |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, it found it's home within you love, utterly wonderfully true. Oh how good you are, if you get much better I'm just going to have to get myself another friend kid.  (You know I'm jesting kid I know! Let me it's called reviving the spirit. Otherwise known as life saving!)Take care and this is really excellant love Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LJA, that you? Such a serious compliment...I'll take it, I'll take it...with a hearty Thanks!... Brian, knowing that makes my day! Thank you... Marsha, friends only add, but never detract...thank you!... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ What a beauty ! My ... it speaks to be shared. The main forum is calling for this one - that's what I think. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful....stunning....beautiful...outstanding...don't have my dictionary handed to translate the beauty from your wonderful piece. love it... ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
A wonderous piece. Beautifully written. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge, if it gets a second nod such as yours, then I surely shall...thank you my friend... Charisma, you are doing fine without a dictionary...I appreciate all you've said, thank you!... Poeminister, thank you very much... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
soul mates fly, at God’s command in eternity, shall walk hand in hand ================= per Margies request...and your reply ... consider this a most sincere NOD!!! consider this in my library as well. jm Am I loved by my words Will my vows weather the tide Bended knees can forsee all the rhythms of life And a heart can be held without pride ~Vante |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, thanks sweetie, as I said the resus trolley is out and I'm being rivived at this very minute. I'll get there kid, with beauty like this how could I not! You know without me saying that it went into my library love don't you. Because they all do. Because they deserve it love that's why Take care love MM I can't quite manage the majestic bit tonight kid or even much of a smile. But I will tomorrow I promise. The sun will come out then Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, isn't it the truth, such an ongoing search, to find that darn piece of paper, or at least the copy. Great story. Sandra |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
...bump... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent. . . truly masterful. . . wonderful my friend. . .  ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
- ahh - the soulmate - how wonderful when one's soulmate is unerringly recognized - in my sometimes despair my loom up until I see obvious examples that soulmates can be found. I loved this K - another great example of your talent |
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