»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #11
»
The Naked Ice (part I)
| Open Poetry #11 |
|
The Naked Ice (part I) |
|
|
Casablanca Confidential Junior Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 13Virgin Islands |
Of all the halls that Peddled gin It was my joint She came Dancing in Her dress was black As if to mourn The passing of A lover's scorn In solitude of my table there I stood up And pulled out A chair The common Pleasantries Exchanged she Told me of Her spouse estranged And then something Of indemnity Doubled down She wanted free She gave me photos Of the louse That left her Mortgage bound With house His business partner's Gambling debts Had left her Broke and In regret She had five hundred Dollars still A pair of legs And lips to thrill My cigarette was burning low My drink was almost gone And so I took her case on Pro-bono And there I was Back at my flat Broke and tired I hung my hat Just as I sat there In a stew About to scrape Gum from my shoe There was a ring And not the phone A golden band a great big stone She'd stuck it in the Envelope now this was Her final hope I took the band And and put it in An old brown flask Of bathtub gin And not too soon Because my door Came crashing down It hit the floor I recognized the eerie tune It was Six String Larry The Shylock's goon He carried a Thompson In in a guitar case had acne scars All over his face He whistled Dixie To all his marks Then left them strangled In the dark A guitar string Around their neck Time to cash in My rain check Under my desk A thirty-eight Had helped me win A few debates I thought I'd get Some questions first Before the answers Were coerced He'd seen me at The hall with Babe And wondered if She knew of Gabe's Whereabouts He had to find him Or he was going To break my hind-limb I told him that She didn't know She'd hired me To find the dough Not good enough He pulled his heater But I sent him To Saint Peter you know how to whistle... just pucker up and blow [This message has been edited by Casablanca Confidential (edited 11-15-2000).] |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Harry Bogart - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
This is just way too cute .I enjoyed that . Holding breath for part 2 lol Suzanne |
||
|
bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
This kept me hanging on for every line... I'm sitting on the edge of my seat waiting for Part 2. Best |
||
|
doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
ROFL!!! i loved this! it's really funny! keep it up! looking forward to part 2!!! welcome to passions  but beware- get your gumshoe stuck here, you may not be able to leave |
||
|
Casablanca Confidential Junior Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 13Virgin Islands |
Thankyou very much Suzanne... glad you liked it Part II will have to wait until tomorrow Bestgirl -- I never post more than 1 poem a day anywhere Doreen... glad you got a giggle... thanks all for reading you know how to whistle... just pucker up and blow |
||
Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to passions. ......and I love your funny entrance.....enjoyed reading it.   Charisma |
||
|
Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Casa, Well done. Welcome to Passions. Look forward to part 2. |
||
|
Casablanca Confidential Junior Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 13Virgin Islands |
thankyou Charisma and Daniel and now let me just say this: My name is new that much is true and this poem may appear my start but something that you do not know I may be more local to these parts So try to guess guess if you can this gumshoe is another man!! you know how to whistle... just pucker up and blow |
||
|
lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Very catchy... like it... where's the beef..? dale |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CasablancaCon~ This rhyme is just wonderful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
||
|
Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey, this is great. . . And I love your name Rick. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A catchy rhyme with a mystery of our own... hmmmmmmmm thinking on this one...will have to hire my own gumshoe perhaps No matter who is behind door #1 this is great writing~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
||
|
Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
ROTF!!! This is priceless! Welcome to our online home...and thanks for the smiles... K |
||
|
kid D Member
since 2000-10-18
Posts 64 |
not too hard a guess.... nice entrance |
||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
CC~ Welcome! Loved your entrance. -SEA |
||
|
Casablanca Confidential Junior Member
since 2000-11-15
Posts 13Virgin Islands |
thanks Dale... are you feelin Lucky? Marge the way you say that makes me feel guilty..!! thanks.. Sven... nice try... and thanks for the compliment.. Madame Butterfly... yes -- it's a mystery who done this... glad you're getting into the game... thanks!! Severn... thanks for the smiles back Here's lookin at you Kid D!! so you think you know something eh? the mystery isn't over yet!!Thanks sea... the pleasure's all mine... and so... the tale continues in open 11!! you know how to whistle... just pucker up and blow |
||
|
Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is quite a mystery I do see, so Casablanca though we see is someone else, ummmmm, gumshoe,maybe toerag just a guess but what the heck!! |
||
|
Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, confidentially... Methinks you know your way around these here parts!!!!..  |
||
|
pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
this kittycat thinks this is kewl! detective work like back in school~! i once was in a feline group taught by the dude who knew the scoop to get out litter from the mess and find out answers, second guess! i'll watch for more - i'll read the clues! perhaps i'll solve and break the news! it's purrrrfectly like sherlock holmes - i'll dig through hints with fine tooth combs! mmmeeeeeooooowwww beware pandora's box... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
