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Melting Time |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Melting Time Remember when the icy wind caught my scarf and shoes were frozen and the wooden plank of sidewalk was chucked with ice that slid to treacherous and your breath blew soft cool mist onto my cheek of reddened flower? That night we cushioned our love touches in the drapes of locked-in darkness for it had been lightly raining and the sound of peace was airing as the ticking drops drowned day and dreamed me tender in its minutes. Some time during that nesting comfort time quieted and all shapes hearkened for its return to blowing dripping but peaceful was the voice that whispered and the words felt just like cotton and woke me to a room of darkling. I left your comfort for the window to see if day had come and gone if earth had twirled us into space for this unsound was filled with wonder then the drapes of magenta whistled as I looked between their folding. A perfect feathering drift of sky sliced the room and lit your face and light exploded without shadow around the pirocantha’s berries for all around the auburn mountains crystal layered the morning landscape. And I was filled with such delight that bare foot took me to the door to reach my hand into the flight of something that so seemed like magic that to this day the memory catches across the years of sun’s bright glisten to the snow that caught my palm and melted time in Sunday reverence. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Okay, so now you have me melting...just beautiful my friend...too beautiful not to reply right away but rest assured I will be back before bedtime even if you don't see me...I will be here..promise you that. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"ticking drops drowned day and dreamed me tender in its minutes." and "A perfect feathering drift of sky sliced the room and lit your face" and "to this day the memory catches across the years of sun’s bright glisten to the snow that caught my palm and melted time in Sunday reverence." (just a sampling of lines that caught me, held me and added to my admiration of your writing skill ~S~) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'bare foot took me to the door to reach my hand into the flight of something that so seemed like magic that to this day the memory catches across the years of sun’s bright glisten to the snow that caught my palm and melted time in Sunday reverence.' Just exquisite memories on display. Each one wrapped in the poetic paper of your telling. You are precious !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--You always make my day with your replies and promises! Bill--You know the song, "we belong to a mu-tu-al, ad-mir-a-tion society" Thanks! Marge--You are a precious sis, you know...Hugs to you! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The beauty of this brought a tear to my eyes Martie...you write so perfectly..a gift that you continue to use to it's fullest~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Soft and beautiful, Martie! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Butterflies--Thank you so much for such lovely words. Denise--you are such a good friend. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
good nite my frined |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Some time during that nesting comfort time quieted and all shapes hearkened for its return to blowing dripping but peaceful was the voice that whispered and the words felt just like cotton and woke me to a room of darkling. I left your comfort for the window to see if day had come and gone if earth had twirled us into space for this unsound was filled with wonder then the drapes of magenta whistled as I looked between their folding. A perfect feathering drift of sky sliced the room and lit your face and light exploded without shadow around the pirocantha’s berries for all around the auburn mountains crystal layered the morning landscape. ==================== ok...it MUST be something in the water there where you live... and Im looking out my window RIGHT NOW ... I dont see these things... HELL my drapes arent even whistling OR FOLDING!!!!! where do ya buy those drapes... does Martha Stewart teach em how to whistle?  HMMMM ... maybe its those pirocantha’s berries... yeah I'll bet thats it... ya brew them in tea and they make ya write AWESOME FREE VERSE... make your eyes see imagery of magical grace ... see that was the problem.. all this time... I been drinking the raspberry tea ... now if i only knew what pirocantha’s berries looked like LOL J/K ... oh and BTW....I LOVED THIS ONE!!!!! later-smoke-those-magic-berrys-gator (hehe) ( now that will make me drapes whistle)  love ya poetic queen me [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
martie just behind janet again and i must say i really did like this ...one day i shall get you to post in CA where i can have a good long ramble...lol thanks philip |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--thanks for stopping buy a second time. Janet--You just got me to laughing and I haven't laughed all day...I really needed that...Thanks, thanks and thanks..and those berries, they're toxic! Philip--I was looking forward to a ramble from you...what happened? Thanks for saying you liked this poem...but I know there is more lurking in that head of yours. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Martie~ Wonderful melting feeling...thanks This is such a beautiful piece with such lovely images...great work Take care Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How I would love to remember those days. How I would love to have lived them!! Thanks to you....I have. Thank you, MArtie |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
sighhh, it is beautiful Martie. I love it "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this won't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Tracy--thanks so much for letting me know you liked this! Balladeer--I know you have other memories..just as sweet. Maree--thanks for the beauitful. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Two things come to mind when I read this, Martie... that I hadn't seen it before, and I get to see some who did... Thank you! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"I left your comfort for the window to see if day had come and gone if earth had twirled us into space for this unsound was filled with wonder then the drapes of magenta whistled as I looked between their folding." beautiful! |
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