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The Saddest Sound,,,,,
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The Saddest Sound,,,,, |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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The saddest sound I ever heard Came not from wren or mockingbird Nor vulture winging blackened sky Producing melancholy cry. No winter winds that weep and moan Can e'er come close to match the tone Resembling death's lullaby - The sound of when she said goodbye. The saddest sound I ever heard Exuded from that single word To echo through the valleys of A heart that had been filled with love Then covered earth with darkened cloud To make the heavens cry out loud. My greatest tragedy occurred With that - the saddest sound I've heard. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Your poem is filled with so much saddness. I don't know what I'd do if he ever said good bye to me. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--The loudest, the sadest, the sound of goodbye is just what you say...the sound of love closing the door hurts. Great poem, deer. |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
that is so sad a feeling . I am glad i have not ever felt that cause if that is how it would feel i would just die inside. great work Suzanne |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
the sound of a goodbye...is always the saddest sounds....the echo sounds it back in your heart ...over and over. thanks for sharing this wonderful piece. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Icy winds consumed my very soul, Just from the look. I stood, Frozen in the moment, Rooted to the cold earth, I became, A twisted , lifeless tree, Stripped of the leaves of love, With gnarled barren branches held upwards., I cried, In an feeble effort to summon the heavens. Then she turned away, And said goodbye As you can see...I know that feeling...nice read Balladeer Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is much more melancholy than He Said Goodbye so my heart tugs even more for you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is beautiful. It's priceless, tender and moving. < !signature--> "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Deer this made me really think back. I too know that awful feeling of being said goodbye too and living alone. This was so sad but so beautifully written. Love & hugs, Juls |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Balladeer - this is the first time you have brought tears to my eyes. It takes a poem with great love and sorrow to do that. And I have been there, and I know - and your words "the tone Resembling death's lullaby - " about the saying of good-bye, are excellently thought out. Too good, dear sir. Too good. Excellent. And my heart goes out to you for having known this anguish. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
inot2B...from what I see of you, that should never happen!  Martie...yep,can be deafening...thank you! Suzanne...great description..that's what happens. I thank you... Charisma...that echo can be nasty for sure! Ron....I'll say you know the feeling!! great writing there... sunshine...I acccept your tugs openly Rose...it's your reply that's priceless. Thank you  Juliet...it's a well-known feeling by many...thank you for the wonderful Rosemary...then we're even because a reply like yours brings tears to MY eyes. Thank you, nice person.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Tugging heartstrings you are. Wonderfully woven phrases that show you're not only a tremendous poet ... but kissed with the marvelous sensitivity of a sweetheart ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The saddest sound I ever heard came from the deadened silent word. A look of nothingness in eyes, When words non-loving reached my sighs. And how I gasped to breathe the air, To purify that deadened stare Forget not ever, the shock unheard From that deadened look of silent word. I, too know that feeling, Balladeer. ~soft huggz to all that have felt it. ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I can almost hear the mourning here intoned... Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
if i gave (i guess i should) crowns for great sad poems - you'd be holding with this one. you sure wrenched my heart. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
balladeer..indeed a very sad sound... but wonderfully written.. hugs, dg "i could hide out under there...i just made you say 'underwear'...i could leave but i'll just stay--all my stuff's here anyway..." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hugs. m'butterbean...sighs--'cause I KNOW. DAMN. Can I hug you publickly, m' deer? {permission accessed. Hugs, underway...) Much love to you, m'friend. Much HUGS. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Marge...thank you, my friend. Sometimes that sensitivity can be a double-edged sword. Wynter...that is incredibly beautiful! Thank you... Jamie...loud and clear.. Wilfred...From you, that is the ultimate compliment. Thank you, sir.. dgvarner....I appreciate your words very much serenity...I ALWAYS want your hugs and I accept them hungrily |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Ball, Oh, so sad! So many types of 'good bye' come to mind. I think this is so beautiful and sad. Your heart was in the middle of this one. Good job. Marcy |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
There's only one positive thing about doors closing - We're forced to open new ones - ones we may not otherwise have noticed.... smoooooooches...  |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Michael ... just beautifully written, tugs at the very depths of one's heart. Wonderful writing with such sorrow embedded through the lines. My heartfelt hugs to you for this lovely and tender write ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Deer one, not being used to this side of you, I have to say I don't want to see you sad! Corinne |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
bal-- your words have taken my words. i am just about speechless. you brought a tear to my eye. to say this is sad would be an understatement. you sir write with a grace and style that i truly envy! and you put your heart into whatever you write, no matter what it's about. but THIS this was like nothing i read from you! i think i've read your heart. and it pains me to know that you know such pain. hugs to you my friend. take care. ~amy~ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Marcy...those are very kind words...thank you Nan...very wise words..you must be a moderator!!!! Kit...why is it that your comments always seem so special? Well, they do... Corinne....we are all made up of so many sides, aren't we? Thank you, nice girl Amy...your words are beautiful to me. Hey, life is just poetry, you know? It's all just poetry..... |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I missed this one. Very sad, very well written. Denise |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
someone said "goodbye"? to YOU???? you're kidding? no way! you certainly have a way with words, 'deer poet... this is a heartfelt work and i'm glad to have had the opportunity to experience it.. i always say, "never say goodbye, just say adieu" (which one of the french girls would explain.. means, 'see you'... but you prob'ly knew that, didn'tcha? )~justme |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I sigh when reading this treasure Balladeer, and I also thank you for sharing such a dearly written poem. Coco |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh M'deer, you already know how much I love this one. It's one of your finest and reminds me of my Grandma. this flows like butter off the tongue and touches the heart, this is beautifully composed and of course I'm printing this out. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rummaging through the archives...finding gems.... |
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Mick Hawkes Member
since 2000-10-26
Posts 90Tees-side , England |
Never a truer word spoken.. superb as always Never take life too seriously - None of us gets out alive! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 Michael! I didn't know you could write like this! |
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