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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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IF If I were to lay a kiss on the wings of wind If I were to send a vision of peaceful sleep If soft caresses through heaven I were to send Would you catch them in your heart to safely keep If I borrowed a star to lighten your tender heart If I romanced Luna so she would brighten your night If I danced across constellations with loves little dart Would you grasp them all and join me in my little flight If Saturn would spiral her rings cascading to stairs If black holes opened the doors of tomorows dreams If Venus would hold us in the visions of her love's cares Would you know that upon the winds,all is just what it seems If the wisping comets swept you up riding within their tail If whispers of warmth appeared kissing you on your cheek If the mistress of breezes suddenly lifted your wings upon sail Would you allow her touch to tell you of the love that you seek If the winds of now brought the gifts of our tomorrow If all of these were sent and placed at the toes of your feet If the happiness were able to take away all of your sorrow Would you kiss my heart in the presence of angels when first we meet Mark Bohannan |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I was just about to leave.....and so very glad I did'nt. This is breathtakingly beautiful. "Would you kiss my heart in the presence of angels when first we meet." How could one not.......I have never read anything so selfless and giving........this just fills my heart with happiness and admiration for you. Your heart is a unique as they come......NEVER CHANGE! Warm smiles Jenn E |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Mark as usual your dancing ummm, simply devine and heavenly, There must be angels singing and the stars twinkling as the sky is your dance floor and the clouds are your cushions of delight. Talking about champagne kisses and caviar dreams! |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
there are no words to describe the absolute beauty of these words...  I would fumble mine just in trying to tell you... GE |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is great! but then everything of yours I have read is rich with images and beauty |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Absolutely beautiful!! Her answer had better be YES! *G* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
only dittoing the above...what is this, you taking ample opportunity of the other men and cowboys out on a break and smiting every female's heart? Hearts up, you win! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ohhhhhhhh.......Mark, a girl would have to be totally insane not to say yes to you. This is really beautiful, and as romantic as they come!! Now I'm seeing cowboys in a whole new perspective.......mmmmmmmmmmm  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I were to lay a kiss on the wings of wind If I were to send a vision of peaceful sleep ==================== If I borrowed a star to lighten your tender heart If I romanced Luna so she would brighten your night ====================== If Saturn would spiral her rings cascading to stairs If black holes opened the doors of tomorows dreams If Venus would hold us in the visions of her love's cares Would you know that upon the winds,all is just what it seems If the wisping comets swept you up riding within their tail If whispers of warmth appeared kissing you on your cheek If the mistress of breezes suddenly lifted your wings upon sail Would you allow her touch to tell you of the love that you seek If the winds of now brought the gifts of our tomorrow If all of these were sent and placed at the toes of your feet If the happiness were able to take away all of your sorrow Would you kiss my heart in the presence of angels when first we meet =================== Mark, this is BY FAR the the most exceptional poem you have written to date... exquisite dont touch it.... my words wont do it justice a woman wanders this earth a lifetime hoping to but once inspire something like this in a man... after writng at this level some would say it was time to lay down the pen... but i know the next one you write WHEN inspired like this... will be as equally breathtaking and stunning your gift of imagery laced emotions is showcased in this piece. (so to answer the question I know you gonna ask...10 baby...10...times 10.)  me |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Mark wow a breathtakingly beautiful piece. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Mark, Excellant writing Mark, I enjoyed very much. Glad that I could come on by. Bill |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, A real romantic write and you won every heart in the place. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
JennE-I promise never to change as I am to damn old to.ROFL....thank you my friend. I so enjoy you coming by. Rosebud1229-Just give me a beer and some beef jerkey and I will be just fine. Thank you so much for you awesome reply. Greeneyes-Thank you so much and no words needed if you felt the verse. Corazon-I do try to accomplish that. Thank you so much. suthern-Let's hope so....but not til the proper time comes. Thanks you. Karilea-Smitin huh????? Thank you my friend for all you are. Sunny1-got to just a cowboy don't ya? At least that is what I have heard...why do you think I became one?LOL Thank you for you and the cool graphic JM-Careful girlie...someone might think you are partial to poets or something and you know how poets are. They are hard as hell to control and mix that with cowboy and well....better bring a posse with ya. Thank you so very much for bringing me so many smiles. Brain-I am so honored by your presence and your gracious words to me. Thank you Bill-Thanks for the visit and I am glad you could as well SY-WOW talk about an honor. Your words you throw down are so far above mine that all I can say is thank you very much for the kind words and as for the hearts...I am only looking for one...so if you wish..LOL |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Mark, The only thing I can say is that I am in complete awe. You are an incredable writer. I hope to write a quarter as well as you one day. rp25 |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Your work is always supreme, this is stunning, it's awesome, knocks me out. Beautiful in every single word. A true artist, well done. Nothing I can say even comes close to how this leaves me.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Mark, this was so very powerful...I tell you this from a woman's point of view, I was figuratively on my knees, whispering "yes, I would, yes". |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
If the one you want doesn't show, I'm sure their are plenty who will take her place. This is so beautiful it makes my old heart flutter. Thank you! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Mark, I have run of of compliments to give you, but here goes - you are the master of romance (besides Sven), I loved this! It's simply beautiful in every way. I always look forward to seeing you post poems, you brighten my day!Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--This is fabulous...the wealth of words and loving thought is incredible...you are one loving hearted cowboy, cowboy! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Oh my dear friend, you did it again. Wow this is beautiful. I love seeing you so happy and full of this wonderful love. Juls |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
rp25-You already do and much more. One thing I have learned here is that YOU write like YOU and everything will shine as YOU want it to. Marsha-Well thank you so much and I do try to paint the best words I can and I am glad you can enjoy them. Passing shadows-ON YOUR KNEES???? well get up girlie....just a simple smile would do honestly. Thank you so much. inot2B-Why thank you but if it isn't in the heart I don't think it would do anyone any good do you? I thank you again for such a sweet reply Melissa-Why thank you and as far as master...well if one deserves that title then one should wear it. It is not for me as I write to share my heart and only my heart, nothing else. I thank you so much for all you say and all you are. Martie-Well thank you my sweet friend. I am so glad that I have friends like you to make me feel good. Juls-I love seeing me happy also my friend. Come to think of it...you seem to be smiling more these days as well. Nice to see and thank you so much |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
YES !  *Grinning here !* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Why thank you so much my sweet girlie friend of feather  |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
If I had not spied this poem tonight If a few minutes I didn't find to rest If your words didn't shine so bright Would I realize this is one of your best? Absolutely! < !signature-->...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -Song of Gesture [This message has been edited by chansondegeste (edited 09-22-2000).] |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Mark, all of your writing is wonderful, but this is phenomenal. I have already read it three times, and plan to several more. Absolutely outstanding! All I have to say is that I wish a man would ask ME those questions!! As others have said, SHE would have to be NUTS not to say yes! sp |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
OMG!!!!! This is so beautiful. You are such a master with words, Mark. If you don't mind, I think I'll have to send this to myself for a keeper. Dee |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
chansondegeste-Why thank you so much and I have to admit that it is one of my favorites of mine as well. Maybe it is because of what my heart was trying to say. snowpants-I am sure there is a man out there somewhere that will or has in his only little way. Words may be different but the thoughts and dreams are often alike. Thank you. Dee-I don't mind at all. Please feel free to keep it and I will forever feel honored that you would do so. Thank you so very much for that. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
darn it, keep forgetting to hit the library button... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
It is the little BOX at the bottom (of the reply screen). Just think about placing the "X" MARKs the SPOT whenever you see this cowboy. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-23-2000).] |
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bebo Junior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 12 |
if i wasn't so hard hearted, i would cry. be happy marc, whatever it takes. |
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bebo Junior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 12 |
i would cry if i wasn't so hard hearted. be happy and remember if wishes were horses we'd all take a ride. make these wishes become reality< !signature-->sorry you got 2 messages, didn't think the first one went thru [This message has been edited by bebo (edited 09-24-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beckie-You mean hard headed dont you????? Thank you so much sis. I love you and am so glad that you joined the family here. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Beckie-So which horse do you want? The white one or the black one and remember...this "IS" a test. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
hmmm so beautiful... sigh Deb |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Debra-Thank you my friend. Always nice to hear from you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Would you kiss my heart in the presence of angels when we first meet... You are truly a man that appreciates the beauty of a woman.. This poem just keep developing into a romantic and beautiful "If" full of hope and desire...James |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
James-that is exactly what it is.....dreams and hopes for my tomorrow. Thank you so much. |
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