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The voyage |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The voyage The past has built a ship for us And it billows o'er the sea. Its sails are full of memory gusts And dreams of yet to be. Through storms and fog and nights of doubt, This vessel has endured. And never will it come about, These karma's are secured. Two souls in love steer its course, Its end is yet to come. It goes beyond the albatross, To weld two souls as one. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"It's sails are full of memory gusts...." Exquisitely written sir! All 3 stanzas are magical, especially touched my soul....as I feel I am too, on a voyage. Thank you for sharing such a wonderfully nautical piece....***curtsies and clapping - - - If I can just touch you once, then I feel I have accomplished what I am called to do...- - pFF |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
What a great poem. I enjoyed this one very much. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Enjoyed the seafaring references you've employed here. This puts me somewhat in the mind of the traditional, "The Water is Wide." I enjoy the concept of Life's ocean being humbly navigated within the vessel of one's own love. You've conveyed this splendidly. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Seymour Tabin: Wow, what a beautifully written poem, it took my breath away. Usually I am not fond of poems like this, but, this one is just perfect and flows so well. Your use of imagery shines, your words are magical. I love this poem!! The first verse sets the tone very well. My favourite lines: "and it bollows o'er the sea. it's sails are full of memory gusts" "it goes beyond the albatross. to weld two souls as one." This is the first poem that I had ever read by you, and I must say I am very impressed. I look forward to more poetry by you. I have poems in critical analysis and in dark passions, feel free to reply to my poems. Thanks!  * Melissa Honeybee * |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
... but then there's me... the perennial lover of poetry about the sea....Love it, Sy...  |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Tis another great poem! I like it greatly! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, Exquisite is the magic pen Whose song of lovely poetry Lifts me up and takes me off To sail the crest of sparkling sea This is beautiful!!! Love ya, Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Very nice imagery Sy - (you're doing the Oscar thing again... )Wonderful. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great imagery and such strong words! Nathan |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Seymour...*sigh*....incredibly lovely, as always...and I agree...every stanza is a bit of magic. Love this one much It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A lovely voyage! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pff, Beautiful comment thank you. *L* Eloise, Your joy is my joy. Meadow, An eligaant comment, thank you. Melissa, a wonderful comment thank you so much. Nan, I know you have a thing for the sea, but how about me? *L* Sy Echo, Thank you Echo. Elizabeth, I was thinking of you when I wrote it. *L* Sy Severn, Thank you severn, comming from you it means alot. Nate, Thanks for the strong words. Caroline, Thanks for the beautiful comment. *L* Deenise, thank you my sweet, love you too. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour - Gosh ... this is just great ! Here I am ... in a little tug boat and you go sailing by ... in a love boat ! I'm swamped by your 'wake' ! Glub ! Glub !  ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
I really enjoyed this poem, as a sailor it went straight to my inner soul and warmed me. Thanks, Paul |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautiful poem Sy. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sy, Arrrrrrr... Me Matey, T'was an inspiring piece . |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Ah, yes, this is lovely! You've put a delicate, beautiful worded poem together that speaks to me of the love between my husband and myself. Wonderful analogy! I couldn't have put it better! 45 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, Well for pity sake come aboard the love boat. *L* Sy. Paul, So glad you enjoyed it, thank you. Martie, Thanks for the nice comment. Dr, Inspiring sounds good to me. Thank you. Rosemary, Beautiful comment, thank you. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore, I believe this to be amoung your most beautiful yet And so upon a ship of love We two set sail as one And through the thick and hazy fog We rise to greet the sun We sail uncharted waters Off the coasts so far away Hoping to reach the quiet shores Of blissfullness someday The futures not fanthoms away But here within our grasp So launch the sails, set course home And tighten up the hatch And when our journeys ended And we've finally reached the shore We'll anchor up our ship of dreams The seas to sail no more [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 12-29-1999).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Hoot, Beautiful! I was going to write this exact same poem, myself, same words and everything! Sy, Am I invited to go along? Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot and Elizabeth, Your both invited And we'll one grand time. Love ya both. Sy Hoot, Your poem is just beautiful [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 12-29-1999).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sy, you have a marvellous gift for words! |
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Richard Junior Member
since 1999-12-27
Posts 35California |
Great---- very stirring poem. Extremely well done. |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Beautiful!!!!!!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Sy. . . you always seem to find the right way to say things. . . This poem is no exception. . . thank you my friend. . . That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To Chris,Richard,Tamera and Sven, Thank you all for your nice comments. Sy |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This is beautiful, just like the tall ships of yesteryear. |
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