Song of Death - Terza Rima

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Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

0 posted 2002-11-17 11:42 AM

Song of Death - Terza Rima

Bereft of love my life lies on your shore,
Enticed by waves that sing a song of grief:
"With me you'll find tranquillity and more."

Enslaved by rage, in search of Death's relief
I hear my requiem escape the tide;
Salvation at long last the sea's motif.

Embraced by salty arms I shall abide,
- While whispers in the wind prelude descent -
And sink into oblivion to hide.

To me this is a gift from Heaven sent,
- My zest for living scattered on your beach -
And silence reaches out from firmament...

But suddenly I hear a seagull screech:
"Come fly with me... come here and soar alive...
Come spread your mighty wings," her call's beseech.

"You have within the strength for your survive,
Break out this trance imposed on you by Death,
Awakened by the call of life's revive."

"You, eerie might with velvet voice of Death,
It's not your Song but life that I adore!
You can't deprive me of my final breath!"

Munda

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

1 posted 2002-11-17 05:05 PM

Well Munda, it's a beauty (I didn't expect less of course

)

Nice to see you in class again.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

2 posted 2002-11-17 08:29 PM

Ah Munda, this is beautiful, and I so admire your tenaciousness...I have yet to kick any of my muses into this format, they are all objecting to getting down to business...

but you, you make it look SO easy...

Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

3 posted 2002-11-18 06:35 PM

Thank you very kindly Titia and it's good to be back.

Lady in white: Thank you for your kind words and I'm sure when you find your muse, we'll be in for a treat.

Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

4 posted 2002-11-18 11:05 PM

Hi Munda!

So glad to see you in class with your outstanding terza rima. Munda, this looks perfect to me. I am so impressed. I'm still struggling with my attempt at terza rima and I can't get the iambic meter right. I'm getting ready to simply put it in the workshop with all it's imperfections. I would appreciate any comments that you might have.

Shenachie

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2002-11-24 08:27 AM

Well, Munda - You've outdone yourself! You have a wonderful theme.. a perfect rhyme scheme threaded throughout... and flawless iambic pentameter...

It works!.. and you rock!..

Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

6 posted 2002-11-27 01:28 PM

Thank you Bridget. It's always such pleasure to read your reply.

Thankee teach! What would I do without you!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2002-11-27 01:59 PM

What would we do without Nan? Skip class [ducking apples]. Munda...you shine!

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