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Tormented Love, Triumphant Hate
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Tormented Love, Triumphant Hate |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US 
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Since I absolutely hate empty forums, I'm posting the only poem I have that seems to fit within the realm of Fantasy & Fancy. You can blame this post on one of Poet deVine's challenge phrases...  Tormented Love, Triumphant HateThey came to Earth from distant stars, Bright angels of the hidden skies, Our brothers, sisters, from afar, Their silken tongues wrapped round their lies. Enchanted was their lilting voice, Perfection surpassed was their form, Seducing all of human choice, Their peace the calm before the storm. Three score and five they massed in all, Dark angels from the darkest space. Love their weapon and their call, Nothing greater could we face. Pheromones some few would say, Telepathy some would contend, Magic might have been their way, It mattered not in tragic end. Within a moon they ruled us all, Directed, beckoned, with soft glove, Like lemmings led to our own fall, Fond victims of tormented love. Our aged first to feel their sting, No good purpose found could they serve, So death was ordered on silent wing, Euthanasia was the common word. The feeble next and then the sick, Pushed to their death by velvet glove, We turned our eyes to who was picked, Fond victims of tormented love. Three years and one passed like a flood, The angels spoke and all would bow, They culled their herds with flowing blood, Only the strong could serve them now. In silent homage, still we served Mystic angels from above, Listening to their every word, Fond victims of tormented love. Our children next came to the fore, Those born too small, infirm or weak. And cries arose from those who bore The effronteries of the meek. More children died, more voices rang, And angels moved to quell the tide. But anger swelled and fiery sang Of our approaching genocide. The war was fought without a gun, No thoughts of bombs above, But bricks and bats and silent men Reliving their tormented love. Perfect voices spoke not words, But screams that rent the night, And perfect forms of perfect lords Were shreds when came the light. The angels learned what Earth could tell, A tale of man's historic fate: There's a fine line 'tween Heav'n and Hell And finer still 'tween Love and Hate - Tormented Love, Triumphant Hate. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You know, I recall that you had written this poem for deVine's challenge, but I never had the opportunity to actually read it...It's wonderful, of course... ... Yet another corner of that wonderful mind of yours unfolds.. ..Got any more I haven't seen? ------------------ Nay, if our wits run the Wild-Goose chase, I am done: For thou hast more of the Wild-Goose in one of thy wits, Than I am sure I have in my whole five. ~ ²1592 Wm. Shakespeare ~ Romeo & Juliet ~ ii. iv. 75 |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Probably. This actually is an example of what my poetry looks like before editing - 'cause I've never gone back to clean up the meter on this one, and it's definitely rough in a few spots. Maybe some day... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Wow Ron. This is my first chance to view ANY of your poetry, and I must admit to being very impressed. I also want to add, as an avid sci-fi/fantasy reader, that this is a fresh new idea, concerning invasion from above (at least in my experience!) ------------------ It's so cool, it's so swell, living here on Ice Planet hell! -Psychotica- |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Christopher, you should read the sci-fi novel Ron is writing (he let us read a sample a while back) - you would be more than impressed. The man can write!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I missed this, and I'm glad we can go back now and see those we missed. I really enjoyed this, and I have read some of your works and I love your poetry. Wish you would post some more. You are a great writer like PdV states! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is also the first of yours that I have had the chance to read. So you're not only a smart computer guy but also a very talented poet as well! Thanks for all your hard work around here and for sharing this poem!  ------------------ Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
What did Nan say? Awesome! HUGS ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The challenge was very hard...you had to use the phrase "tormented love, triumphant hate".. it was amazing at the different interpretations of those words....if you'd like to try it, be my guest!!!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ron, A wonderful piece of writing. |
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freespiritfem Junior Member
since 1999-10-07
Posts 49Cordova,Alabama,USA |
Ron...TERRIFIC....I really enjoyed reading this greatly!!! Very interesting...I love sci-fi..!!! ------------------ Paula Diane S. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sitting here in awe....masterfully done ------------------ This is courage...to bear unflinchingly what heaven sends. ~Eurpides |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wowee!! Yeah, you certainly don't post often enough Ron! I thought I'd try out my little "problem" posting on your very own!! hehehe ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Uh...now I feel like an idiot....thanks Ron. LOL ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Okay, ya'll are going to force me to either write something new or dig into my vault. I appreciate all the kind comments, but this is not a poem I've ever been real happy with (that was one tough challenge phrase for me!). Mmmm, maybe I could write at least some of the new software in meter and rhyme? That would kill two birds with one stone, with the added benefit of discovering whether Ceres has a sense of humor! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Absolutely Wonderful Ron! I am another sci fi enthusiast. Thank you for sharing this piece with us. ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Ron, I enjoyed every single word! Delightful Jenny Lee |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
a poem of kind of life, well said. and sad. beautiful poem again. |
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