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I Hear What He Wants Me To Hear
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I Hear What He Wants Me To Hear |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Watching his eyes as he speaks I hear what he wants me to hear Listening again to familiar lies There’s that same recurrent fear. He’s been with you, I can tell his eyes shine with passion’s lights you’ve lain with him, I smell you as I have many other nights. He rambles on as I fix his plate knowing he dined on your desire silently, I listen to the lies hoping soon his voice will tire. Silently screaming inside my head eyes refusing to show my distress He kisses me good night never knowing he’s the cause of my timidness I hear what he wants me to hear something inside me is soiled dangerous, hidden venomous a murderous snake lies coiled. Fear that I will strike out at him keeps my silent sentiment wondering, yet if I could quietly find a weapon of punishment. One thing will cause him to feel a pain, vivid through and through if I could find a way, dear sister, to do away with you. |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
This is so sad Want some advice from a fool? A man who likes to ramble Well he can’t be all that bad Tell your man to call your sister To say she’s making you sad That you should talk about it See if she’d be willing to meet Then drive her down to the river And pour cement around her feet |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Cute, very cute...gearing up for the community poem? Didn't see your name on the list yet!!  |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
I wish I could oblige but I went once and was turned down flat by the Tattooed Lady, it left scars so deep that I find it hard to even talk about the C word |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
deVine one, I've read many of your poems. This one tops the list in my book. It's real and well-written. Craig, that was the tattooed lady's loss. And it will be our loss if you stay away. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I am hoping this works, looks for the instruction manual and finds none......anyway, I could not let this poem go without a reply. Very well written, good rhyme and the words just flow...each stanza leads so teasingly into the next. Excellent job!! |
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Franni Junior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 39 |
You have struck a chord in many women with this poem. It is a topic many deal with at some time in their lives. You expressed it vividly. Great poem! |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Poet deVine...You are so quickly becoming my hero...I really love your work! But might I add, I know this is not a community piece, but I could not resist... A fool I was to love one not mine But I tread where I should not go Only to feel this life's not my own Death is a wish I too know So speak of cement, and wishes of end But don't forget the simple fact You have him in name, in heart and in home I simply shared him in act ------------------ Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all so much! Your affirmation again makes my day! azblond, I love that I'm your hero! And you can post a poetic response to ANY of my poems...it's fun isn't it? |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I tell you Ms. deVine, each poem I read of yours gets better and better! I've never seen such a place full of so much talent. There's no place like "poems."  |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Lovely piece, but I tend to enjoy tragedy, so my opinion may be suspect. ------------------ I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
This poem is so real and wonderfully written! I think it would be so great if you wrote an encore to this... if perhaps you did do away with her... I think it would be very interesting. Inspiring poetry! I can't wait for more! ------------------ ~one voice~ For Myself, I live, Live intensely and am fed by life, and my value, whatever it be, is in my own kind of expression of that. *Henry James |
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Poetwheel Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 208Canada |
Great piece of work. I kept waiting for the poor wife to lash out at the bugger and when you drop the last 2 lines and we discover perhaps, why she has kept her silence.... very well done. Perhaps, though, for the jaw-clenching sadist, a sequel, where she kicks his sorry @&& and the sister is eaten by bloodthirsty crawfish! ------------------ Poetic Wheelbarrow |
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blueloon Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 161NY |
your content is as real as the words that create the emotions that flooded through me while reading. leaving me thirsting for more. blueloon |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ouch! That one hurt. Everything fell into place with a bombshell ending. I bow to you and your talent. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
This is really good. I am glad that I didn't miss it. Alison |
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