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Bondage (Tarot Challenge) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I am the balance You fail to maintain Self doubt, your comfort Standing, judging Not of here Not of there Somewhere in between Uncertainty stifles Will your soul Be sacrificed Passed to the beast Of your excuses? You dare Judge others Willing yourself To believe You are the virtuous one Last card turned XV slides atop Temperance lost "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is soooooooooooo psychologically astute. Deceptively simple Now let me see if I get this right, because like I said, it's deceptive. "I am the balance You fail to maintain Self doubt, your comfort" People get all hung up on accuracy and truth in poetry and in life; poetry ain't reporting and life experience is subject to the colors of our own perceptions. So... "I am the balance You fail to maintain" What is most important is the speaker feels objectified, even if the object in question is a not a tangible noun. It renders one a tool, and that's always a bad way to start. (The complexity comes in with the questions you seek answers for in philosophy, which is doesn't everyone expect something from everyone else?) "Self doubt, your comfort" I'm nodding again. Many of us (read huge blinking light over ME)have defined ourselves to stagnation, embracing even the things which are unfavorable. (I'm at the behavior modification part. With a prescription for chantix! *laughing and winking*) But some think that self-confidence means self-acceptance and shrug off their foibles as "just who I am." Beware of them folk. They are not only gonna not TRY--they will expect you to be the "ever nurtuering, understanding 'mother'". I won't go line by line, 'cause I don't have the time, but I felt your second stanza was a natural evolution of your opener: "Standing, judging Not of here Not of there Somewhere in between Uncertainty stifles" We "Will your soul Be sacrificed Passed to the beast Of your excuses?" This is the plaintive painful plea, and it hurts too--and the difference between reasons and excuses is point of view. But I think I 'get' this--tired of words that mean nothing. It's "show me or "b'low me" time." "You dare Judge others Willing yourself To believe You are the virtuous one" Now this one is tricky too, because, paradoxically, deeming someone judgemental is a judgement. "Last card turned up" I might have left it at "last call" just to play on the word on the word temperance and suggest indulgence, but that's just me. The reveal of the next card as you imply suggests that this the subject is cyclic, yet predictable. Thanks for playing. Thanks for understanding that there ain't no wrong answer. And thanks for taking the challenge and keeping it uniquely you. Love you lady!  You are growing so fast you will soon be Amazon.  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
ohhhhhhh...."last call" does fit so much better..  I'd be all modest here, but oh hell, I even liked this one.  and I loved putting the time into it. love you too! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: Glow, girl. I'll be back to take it all in...including the challenge! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan -- between Ser and you, I seem to be learning a little tarot. Yours really made me think deeply and see different angles. This tarot challenge is really interesting, isn't it?!  .......jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, I am intrigued by your approach to Temperance. A fascinating study, indeed. Your searching and philosophical mind is a beautiful thing to behold! You see things that others may not. You delve deeply and with much thought. I appreciate both yours and iliana's interpretations of the Archangel Michael card.  I also enjoyed reading the Serene One's in-depth responses to both of your poetic offerings. Love and moderation in all things! ~ Well, perhaps not in ALL things! lol Linda |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is great! Serenity's anaysis pretty much says it all, so I'll just agree. On a side note, many years ago I had a young friend who was really into bondage; she was a lot of fun when we could arrange our schedules to see each other, but most of the time, whenever I was free she was all tied up. I guess it just wasn't in the cards. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you for the kind responses. and Icy? I totally believe your story..."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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