Dying to Live (Terza Rima style poetry)

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JLHunter
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0 posted 2006-10-09 01:23 AM

Dying to Live
(Terza Rima style poetry)

From off this bier I will arise one day.
And nothing that has cowered me before,
Will hie me back again from whence I stray;
I leave, and seal the mausoleum door.
When from that threshold that I do depart,
I leave my travails lying on the floor.
Knowing that this new life stands apart,
I turn my back on fear I cannot tame.
Determining that I will make a start,
Where love and hopes rebound, and bear not shame.
But fear will not hinder my hurried flight,
From hush-voiced days I lost that whispered blame.
And though I stumbled through with blinded sight,
I boldly challenge terror-shrouded night.

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

Honeybunch
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1 posted 2006-10-09 05:17 AM

"Knowing that this new life stands apart,"

Indeed it does - we just have to know it though. Enjoyed your positive approach in this.

JLHunter
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2 posted 2006-10-09 05:53 AM

Hi, Honeybunch.

You sure get around! Nice to "see" you again.

Thanks for the positive feedback. This post was particularly personal as I have been ill for quite some time. As I have been feeling somewhat better these past few weeks, I was inspired to thumb my nose at my bed and bedroom, the bier and the mausoleum.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

passing shadows
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3 posted 2006-10-09 07:25 AM

what strength! I admire you!

JLHunter
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4 posted 2006-10-09 07:47 AM

Thanks again, passing shadows.

I don't know if I'm quite as strong as you imagine, but I "poem" it with conviction, don't I? LOL

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

JesusChristPose
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5 posted 2006-10-09 10:55 AM

Reminded me somewhat of Edgar, himself. Well done.

"Melvin, the best thing you got going for you is your willingness to humiliate yourself."

The Lady
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6 posted 2006-10-09 04:43 PM

amazing poem JL...

Sunshine

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7 posted 2006-10-09 04:50 PM

We are grateful for your return to health, John. You've got quite a lot to share...

and you share it very well.

Pilgrimage
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8 posted 2006-10-09 05:00 PM

I've always liked the Terza Rima style, and I like the positive aspect of this one.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JLHunter
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9 posted 2006-10-10 12:16 PM

Thanks, JesusChristPose.

Funny, I don't see it myself, but you are noy the first to compare some of my works to Poe. I happen to love Poe, but I never deliberatel imitated him. Perhaps he just rubbed off on me?

Thanks again.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

JLHunter
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10 posted 2006-10-10 12:18 PM

Thanks, Lady.

LOL That sounds pretty generic! But I am sincere. Thanks for the nice comments.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

JLHunter
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11 posted 2006-10-10 12:21 PM

Hi again, Sunshine!

You are as a bright ray of...um...well, "sunshine!" Thanks for your kind comments. I really appreciate them.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

JLHunter
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12 posted 2006-10-10 12:23 PM

Hi, Pilgrimage.

Believe it or not, I've seen these before, but this was my very first try at writing one. I am glad that you, and so many others, seem to enjoy it. That gives me encouragement to try again.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

Marge Tindal

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13 posted 2006-10-10 07:45 AM

John~
Terza Rima is not an 'easy' form to do,
you nailed it !

When I read, I find that a thought 'jumps out' and grabs me ... in this piece it was 'hush-voiced days' ... I love the very thought of it~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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JLHunter
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14 posted 2006-10-10 08:06 AM

Hi, Marge

Thanks for saying that I "nailed it." As I said previously, this was my first try...

Thanks also for the kind words. This post was a reaction to th fact that I have been ill for quite some time. Those "hush-voiced days" alluded to the people, in and out of the hospital, who spend the whole time whispering--as if they have a secret about my conditon that is too horrible to share, or worse to me(!), that they think I'm faking or too weak-willed to fight back!

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

sewasham
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15 posted 2006-10-10 09:12 PM

Great job on a difficult form. This is very well done. Thanks for sharing. Take care and Have fun. Steve

Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 2006-10-10 09:53 PM

JLHunter
This is part of this and that
Very lean and has no fat. Enjoyed Good health

JLHunter
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17 posted 2006-10-11 12:52 PM

Hi, Steve.

Thanks for the kind words. And so far, I'm having a blast!

Thanks again.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

JLHunter
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18 posted 2006-10-11 12:53 PM

Hi, Seymour.

"This is part of this and that
Very lean and has no fat."

LOL Very good! And thanks for the nice welcome.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

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19 posted 2006-10-11 09:22 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
You have mastered a most difficult form here.
Well done Sir, and I look forward to reading more of your words.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

JLHunter
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20 posted 2006-10-11 05:34 PM

Hi again, Nancy!

Thanks for the kind welcome. And thanks for the thoughtful comments!

~Smiles & Hugs~ back to you!

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

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