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Open Poetry #39

Cat Scratch Brat

Triskaidekaphobia
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

0 posted 2006-10-08 02:32 PM

There's a girl who I think we all know...

Like a cat scratch she cuts herself lightly
and listens to the needle tracks on a CD.
Her sadness all feigned and invention.
A walking deception craving attention.
Like a Sylvia Plath melodramatic recital
she scrawls a fake angry "Goodbye, all"
across her school books
just to get a few looks.

There's a girl who I think doesn't know...

That the blonde girl she thinks is so happy
has an unspoken wish to bleed out slowly.
Her quiet anguish an unbearable weight
turns her life into everything she hates.
That girl who last night wrote her suicide note,
hid deliberately poorly in a pocket of her coat,
wishes someone would see
her hopeless "Help me".

There's a girl who I think should be shown
that blonde girl who died bleeding alone.

"The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun
With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun."

One God by The Beautiful South

JesusChristPose
Senior Member

since 2005-06-21

Posts 777
Pittsburgh, Pa

1 posted 2006-10-08 04:46 PM

~ This is "right up my alley."

~ The rhyming scheme was very well done. It reminded me of lyrics from various prog metal bands that I admire.

~ The story told well, and was "dead on" for its purpose.

~ Thumb is up!

"Melvin, the best thing you got going for you is your willingness to humiliate yourself."

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-10-08 04:47 PM

yes
and I know this girl
Tris
one of her at least...
well done

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