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Stones in the Tide
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Stones in the Tide |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Stones in the tide Make as much of a wave As these words I write Make upon your heart Plunk Plunk Plunk They drop to the bottom Like words weighed down With passionless Unused emotion Plunk Plunk Plunk Titanic tombs hold them Unsaid, unheard, unread Rocks in the ocean of blue They lie unwritten dead |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine One of your best. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
stones of misery good to read you again but it hurts, too |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's been a long time lovie. (all my fault too) and I agree with sy, although I get confused sometimes when I read you, as it's hard to put "best" in order when it's all good. The construction was effective for me visually too. plunk plunk plunk Nodding. May I join you? plunk Some days are like that...  Titanic tomb was a nice touch too.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good to read you...I felt the beat of this..right down to the last word, which was perfectly placed.  |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I like the tone of this write Poet! believe in what your heart feels... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Now, that's a good analogy! And, I don't think I need to say why, really, if it's okay with you.  .....jo |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for the kind replies.... I actually posted this in the Haven in 2002..I went looking for some of my work and found this. I do not remember writing it although I do remember the circumstances. A couple of us were on an IM and we'd each take turns throwing out phrases..we'd have to use it in a poem and post it immediately. Sigh...so it isn't new...the muse is not back, just wanted to be honest with you. I miss writing... |
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