There is Poetry (but what with the leftovers and loose ends)

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Open Poetry #39

There is Poetry (but what with the leftovers and loose ends)

MukkaKukka
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since 2006-09-18

Posts 88
Finland

0 posted 2006-09-23 04:56 PM

The moment all poets cease.

The Symbol

Crumbles.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

1 posted 2006-09-23 06:05 PM

nicely brewed thoughts

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-09-23 06:47 PM

your brevity
speaks well MukkaKukka
nicely done...

seraphin
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since 2000-09-24

Posts 1004
Michigan

3 posted 2006-09-24 08:34 AM

Well thought, well worded. A very nice work with some personal bite. I like this, I do.

Sandra

Brian James
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since 2005-06-26

Posts 147
Winnipeg

4 posted 2006-09-24 08:44 AM

We're not a totally unbiased bunch on this topic. Speaking of your poem, I still think you can say even more with even less---for example, "poets cease" is a little imprecise since "cease" needs to refer to some kind of action (maybe "poetry ceases" would be a better compliment to "symbol crumbles"). I also think something more concrete than "symbol" would have made the very concrete notion of "crumbling" more felt---maybe find a good symbol for "Symbol" and use that instead. Even metapoetry's gotta be poetry, after all.

Now relax and enjoy a few pats on the back.

Brian

"To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form."
~Robert Frost

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2006-09-24 12:01 PM

A lot of debate could occur over the wording,
but I found it very clear in the meaning.

And the message is strongly voiced within
so few words. Welcome to Passions.

MukkaKukka
Member

since 2006-09-18

Posts 88
Finland

6 posted 2006-09-24 05:46 PM

I have to reply.

All the poems that Ive written on this forum have been written just like that , I sit in front of the keyboard

and there.

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