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Open Poetry #39

breathless night

william foos
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since 2006-09-13

Posts 77
schenectady,new york,usa

0 posted 2006-09-21 07:56 PM

the night collapses into day
leaving my spirit breathless
gasping for the reality
of my sence of being
should i re-look at my soul
to know the why of me
i must serch for the reason
that this earth is keeping
answers from my mind
as the day rebirths the night

i see what i write and write what i see

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2006-09-21 08:03 PM

"should i re-look at my soul
to know the why of me"

always

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-09-21 10:39 PM

"as the day rebirths the night"

nice write william...
it flows

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

3 posted 2006-09-21 11:31 PM

I was just about to slip you an email....when it dawned on me, darn if they're not intentional.....I just love to lern a new trick!

And the poem, nicely done with or without. Methinks I'll be looking forward to your poetic deeds!

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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2006-09-22 12:03 PM

Hi William....I'm glad to see you back...

That first and last line are fresh and perfectly placed. I also like the searching mood.

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