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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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there will always be sun there at the veranda overlooking sinful and you will always have the craving to be tan and tan lineless I have seen it in your eyes when you said you missed the bad that you were never given as choice and you really want to know it just for research of course not to be part of the condition that takes over a lover's mind and makes them do things delightful but then they see there is a line at all of the entrances of proper so they just sneek in sometimes and get it all over them quickly pretending they were never really there _____________ daark |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kind of like the invisible man, hey? Enjoyed this, Sir. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun..kind of like a whisper's echo..thanks ms |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
A most excellent writ of wit... just enough... one touch 'over the line' (tan line that is... if one is lucky). I really enjoyed this for its tongue in cheek (and elsewhere) illusions. Write On!! MoonShadow |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Enjoyed this one  |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Mr Dark.... you sure know how to make a girl smile here... enjoyed RDB |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
friend moon, thank you for the review and grin content. _____________ interloper, thank you for the read and comment ___________ ms b, a smile is my favorite reward, thank you |
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kaila Junior Member
since 2006-12-24
Posts 37PA |
Enjoyed the image and the message. The opening stanza really sets up the meaning, like a creative thesis to a well-written essay. I loved the tone. kaila |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you have a way of saying things like no other... ~~**~~ |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
Geesh people leave me something to comment on. I would agree with greeneyes you have a clever way of showing your art |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
A line at all the entrances of proper? Should know better than to dare daark to go where the sun doesn't shine. What a contradiction of terms!  [This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (12-30-2006 01:06 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
kaila, thank you so much for the read ___________ ladylauren, bless you wickedly my dear ______________ trutoamigo, thank you for the visit and friendly review ____________ ms kl, you make me smile babe, thanks |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You are a talented writer. I really enjoyed this piece. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
michael, humble thanks for the read and comment |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
No body observes proper entrances quite like you do...of course, just for research..  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS....I'm looking forward to your linemore of poetry this new year.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms gs, thanks donna for the touch ________________ ms martie, thanks little neighbor, you inspire me often. |
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