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Spanish Moss |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Spanish Moss Deep, buried deep in dark, dank, ground musty leaves and Spanish moss drooping down, a treasured chest, buried alone, call it home, buried deep down, where thoughts ne’er roam. Within cavernous wood and green ironed lock lies undisturbed pink silk, some young girl’s frock, amidst linen doll, ball of yarn, sad, lonesome key; lies deep, dark, dank, the hidden heart of thee. With the razing of the land, hands uncover treasured chest, left alone after loss of lover; discounted, forgotten moments unburied now come again to grips with sunlight’s vow. For sunlight saw forbidden love high above, fallen tears, rambled curses, treasured chest shoved deep, buried deep down, dark, dank, ground musty leaves and Spanish moss drooping down. Perhaps a hundred or more years ago a lover loved, lost, despaired so; then treasured chest carried there once buried deep, dark, bereft of air; …with only Spanish moss to mourn. ~*~ 17 January, 2000 ©KRJ Revised 14 September 2006 |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
May I have this....please? I'm going to go off somewhere and sit really still and quiet for a little while.... ~~J |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie...you do see behind and under....even time. This felt like my hands within the dirt right after rain.  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"…with only Spanish moss to mourn." wonderful poem beautiful story and that last line is so poignant... |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
What a wonderful, deep dark story of loss. Joyce |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
I must agree with Joyce Johnson: "What a wonderful, deep dark story of loss." |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
A hundred years....perhaps a start to heal the loss of a lover’s heart. A hundred years won’t pale the rage or ease the hurt, nor yet assuage, but deeper time this heart would need, if ever to be fully freed; no silk could soothe away the tears, nor any time expressed in years. So like this verse, so quickly gone when love would wish it to go on, never by ink imprisoned be, let eyes behold, and set it free. Which is to say, this truly deserves a bump....and shall have it! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a poignantly beautiful poem Karilea. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes, this is a royal beauty  My spirit will rise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
 I just love the mystery in this, SIL. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
and I almost missed this one how..... oh, so very poignant, delicate, and softly lovely.... |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Sunshine, this is so beautiful. I enjoyed from the beginning to the end. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Perfectly lovely. Sandra |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
A lovely piece of work with great rhyme and flow. I really enjoyed this. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sunshine...Touching story. Really really enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
and they say, time heals all wounds, I believe it...and this, is so perfectely written, and felt...lovely but bittersweet poem.... discounted, forgotten moments unburied now come again to grips with sunlight’s vow. For sunlight saw forbidden love high above, fallen tears, rambled curses, treasured chest shoved deep, buried deep down, dark, dank, ground musty leaves and Spanish moss drooping down. all within the seasons of life dear lady |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...I'm in awe love the new pic too |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
Perhaps a hundred or more years ago a lover loved, lost, despaired so; then treasured chest carried there once buried deep, dark, bereft of air; …with only Spanish moss to mourn. Wow...what an ending...your poetry speaks volumes to me. Hard to describe how though. |
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