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Open Poetry #39

Nagging

cbautista
Junior Member

since 2006-09-13

Posts 38

0 posted 2006-09-14 09:37 AM

Is it pretend or make believe
The kindness that comes through
After all I've said to you,
I want your kindness too.

So now how do tell
Where it all begins and ends
Truth and lies hold hand in hand
In a grand operatic dance
Where shadows blend into light
Intertwine in intimate bands.

How can I decipher it now
When I was the orchestra master
Of this whimsical ballet
By initiating the beginning
With a wave of my baton.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2006-09-14 10:07 AM

ms cb, interesting concept, waving the bait and then being captured by the same..enjoyed it

burntsiena
Junior Member

since 2006-08-10

Posts 34
Rhode Island

2 posted 2006-09-14 01:29 PM

I liked the way you explained the blending - very very good! Then to find the speaker is the cause of the troubles - i was even more surprised! Thank you.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-09-14 05:28 PM

nicely done
cb...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2006-09-14 06:04 PM

Very nicely penned and much enjoyed.
Hugs~Nancy

~ Autumn..the year's last, loveliest
smile. ~

cbautista
Junior Member

since 2006-09-13

Posts 38

5 posted 2006-09-14 09:32 PM

Thank you all, and any criticism would be much appreciated.

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