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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2006-09-14 07:36 AM

butterfly
wing of palm
above pearl
without wind whisper

soothsong
slippery sway sound
of glass on water
fathom depth

but deeper
than a heart sleeve
than a skin end
than a dream

butterfly
palm with wings
surrounding pearl
within winds whisper

soothsong

___________

daark

scribblenote: soothsymbol place for mind eye

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2006-09-14 07:43 AM

A good place
to meditate...

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2006-09-14 07:48 AM

ms sun, thank you for your morning whisper

cbautista
Junior Member

since 2006-09-13

Posts 38

3 posted 2006-09-14 09:46 AM

Your writing style reminds me of William Carlos Williams. If you haven't read it, read the Red Wheel Barrow.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2006-09-14 10:03 AM

ms cb, I can see some juxtaposition with your example, thank you for the read.

cbautista
Junior Member

since 2006-09-13

Posts 38

5 posted 2006-09-14 10:33 AM

I actually am a fan of his. The short clipped tones, so precise. It's hard to emulate but I feel the way you express your words blend into his style but still remaining your own uniqueness.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2006-09-14 10:53 AM

DS Some times you are deeper than a heart sleeve.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2006-09-14 11:04 AM

A beautiful soothsong heartsleeve melody heard in your words, and on your sleeve. Nice, very nice Dark buddie.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2006-09-14 11:09 AM

ms cb, am blessed by your suggestion, humble thanks

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ms martie, thank you little neighbor, as always you make me smile

________________

ms gs, thank you for your eyes and whispers

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

9 posted 2006-09-14 05:14 PM

sweet wings
of the butterfly
above pearl
very soothing
Stranger…
so much more than a dream

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2006-09-14 06:43 PM

ladyone
a pleasure place
with soft sigh doors and windows
thank you for visiting

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