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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2006-12-14 10:42 AM

Inkling~*~

So long I have now waited, prospect to see you smile
Watching with attentive heart, along each endless mile
Walking slowly to catch up, then walking fast to flee
Reaching out with open arms, aspires unendingly

Recovering courageous stance that wanes beyond your view
Discouraging such brave ideals, romance might put me through
Apparently, a heart like mine ignites upon a glance
Kept veiled unto the naked eye, made mute in relevance

Not of the sort to wade within the confines of the dark
As soul for certain rendezvous might destiny embark
Just down a path of brilliant fall, perhaps to spend one day
Where I will find you leaning on a wise word by the way

Copyright Kkh 12/14/06

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2006-12-14 10:53 AM

I had an inkling I'd like this work

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2006-12-14 10:56 AM

Apparently, a heart like mine ignites upon a glance
Kept veiled unto the naked eye, made mute in relevance

how beautifully poignant!!!!!!
loved this

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

3 posted 2006-12-14 11:17 AM

TDiamond... beautiful write...

"Recovering courageous stance that wanes beyond your view... discouraging such brave ideals, romance might put me through."

Nice imagery describing a facade to shield uncertainty and hesitancy... so difficult to let go and unconditionally trust/love.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-12-14 11:49 AM

I love that ending!!

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

5 posted 2006-12-14 01:08 PM

Oh, I love the last line.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2006-12-14 02:12 PM

"Just down a path of brilliant fall, perhaps to spend one day
Where I will find you leaning on a wise word by the way"

I’m in awe. This is an excellent write.
Love this last verse.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2006-12-14 02:27 PM

oh, TD! There are so many wonderful lines in this! The rhythm and word choice is superb.

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