Open Poetry #39 |
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buzzing like a bad bad girl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738![]() |
I starve me to the least of pang just a flat note of the hand extended fancy dancing as petulance releases us with just a half note lidded as if the quill had much to drink a quiver and a sad sad smile- drums of non existances banging dangling my verbs and participled versed curse webbed signs of promises in the quarter of the nine in one learned mile of mine and struts of discomfortune laugh buzzing like a bad bad girl I wish I hadn't known this world I wish that I could pull white sheets up above my shoulder and I turn my back to dream and these are simple nods of courtesy with a wink of heresy trace of grace of wind and scarf pointing with a toe and stress on the tambourine a jing jing-jing-jing I'm listening to the sound of crisp clean sheets muscled by the very lies of ankles held together tight and I am weary of the dream-- buzzing like a bad bad girl... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"banging dangling my verbs and participled versed curse webbed signs of promises in the quarter of the nine in one learned mile of mine" ![]() |
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Obscurity Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 153In A Melancholic Dream |
I feel like this almost every day. It's sad, yet comforting to release the feelings of ones self. I loved the poem very much so |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, These feeling like the breeze touch me every day. ![]() |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bad is my favorite candy serene one enjoyed |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
with just a half note lidded as if the quill had much to drink a quiver and a sad sad smile- drums of non existances banging dangling my verbs and participled versed curse webbed signs of promises in the quarter of the nine in one learned mile of mine and struts of discomfortune laugh ... I'm listening ... ~*~ Just when I think you're in one corner you turn around and wink. You are the epitomy of spirited hope... and a candle in every window. You never, ever, let us down. If nothing, you lift. ![]() |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this. ::waves:: -Juju -<>-~-<>-~-<>- |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Wow! Serenity, this is just incredible! What can I say? misC |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
I don't know what it is about your poetry, its like you reach a part of me that before I read you had no words...and after, I am not sure I understand the depths of me that you reached, but there is a comfort that filters in just knowing that you feel it too... ok...confused enough?...lumin curtsies and leaves |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all so much for reading me. I don't write as much as I used to--and after reading a few comments about what proper poetry is, I tried to quit altogether. I seem to have problems with relinquishing bad habits though. ![]() So thank you all for indulging me in my journal entries--and I promise I will continue my quest to abandon myself entirely so I can write better. ![]() ![]() Thanks to you all with my love and gratitude. ![]() |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
I, for one thouroughly enjoy your work. you should not change one thing in the name of propriety. |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
it flows like a song, a sad song, but a good one. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"I'm listening to the sound of crisp clean sheets muscled by the very lies of ankles held together tight" write better than this? how? |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
my dear lady serenity ~sigh~ you can spit on the page and then simply leave an exclamation point! and I'd still read you far more often than any 'proper' poets of propriety...though I'm not sure who they might be as I likely never read them ![]() besides, what Sunshine said is true you are UPLIFTING, and all us dumb boobs are thankful for your presents and presence |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Here's another dumb boob ![]() ![]() Waste not a second ~ Carpe' Diem |
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Strathaniel Junior Member
since 2006-10-17
Posts 12 |
Brilliant!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen lovey (I hope you don't mind if I steal that term of endearment)...you astound me...I want to write like you, but since I can only write like me, I at least want to read the things held as you do, within that amazing soul and heart. ![]() |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ser, I wanted to say something about how this made me feel.. but, I can't find the words.. So, I'll just sit here a spell and listen to the sound of your tambourine jing, jing, jing. Love you lady~ Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karen, I have no idea how you do this. And I read and re-read because you stretch my feeble mind. But mostly I see it if I dream. ![]() If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
I am with Larry on this....LOL. serenity - to say 'proper' poetry... ...is like saying 'proper' wind... or a 'proper' ray of sunshine... To each a different inspiration, a different meaning. I think your poetry is 'proper' for you.. ...even though, most times goes over my head...or thru it... LOL Don't stop. CG |
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