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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2006-12-05 03:08 PM

{From my journals}

~~**~~

that I am indeed lost in the

canvas of this form

so I watched the changes in you
and me

as if I were the souls edge

where sea and tide rise –

where moon greets shifting stars

with the passing crumble of stone/s

who will guide me to the 'rest' in nights

while I drift on some winter storm

awaiting each crystal

to form her beauty

             I am as empty

as the rose

that tries to touch the rivers bend

the season of air between
palm and prayer

the press of body
between grain and sand
                silence fills you;    becomes me

so the rain will fall
wet upon your lips

drops of tin and stone

and I will search for the dust of you

in broken glass
&breaking light
to paint some color on warmth of flesh
and echo my vacant dreams

                  to bury the grey of stone

in the amber of my sleep

to remind me how orchids
cry

and I am always
within the shades of your
echo/s and dream/s

bidding       farewell

Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

MoonShadow
Senior Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.

1 posted 2006-12-05 03:22 PM

"I am always within the shades of your echos and dreams"

Very powerful imagery, especially when spoken by one who prefers to dwell in the reclusive shadow of the moon. Speaks volumes to me.

Nicely Written Milady Greeneyes.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2006-12-05 03:47 PM

the season of air between
palm and prayer

the press of body
between grain and sand
silence fills you; becomes me

so the rain will fall
wet upon your lips

profoundly written, it is always a feast for the eyes & soul to read you

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

3 posted 2006-12-05 03:48 PM

a plethora of great images here

I like the way italics are used to establish a second perspective

thanks for sharing

PLEASE VISIT MY WEB SITE http://www.anthonyarmstrong.zoomshare.com

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2006-12-05 04:03 PM

1derful write

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2006-12-05 04:08 PM

Your writing is so exquisite that it turns my blue eyes Green!

Lauren, you truly are a poetess extraordinaire!

Giving you a big, warm hug,
Linda

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

6 posted 2006-12-05 04:24 PM

good to read now off toread for more from you.

kingsangel

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2006-12-05 04:33 PM

sis, have missed you and your words....ahhhh...I saw your name and knew I would love this. I was correct.

You soar with this Lady L....love you...

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

8 posted 2006-12-05 09:45 PM

simply stunning write! RDB

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

9 posted 2006-12-06 08:44 AM

Thank you all for stopping by.....

hugsss and love to all

Happy Holidays

Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

10 posted 2006-12-06 11:58 AM

How absolutely lovely.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2006-12-06 05:11 PM

Nice writing...James

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2006-12-08 10:09 AM

Lauren!

You are still the same outstanding poet I have grown to love to read..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

13 posted 2006-12-08 01:47 PM

Lauren....That journal you keep is precious...keep it safe.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

14 posted 2006-12-08 02:19 PM

Greeneyes

"the season of air between
palm and prayer" Is a Gem

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

15 posted 2006-12-11 11:35 AM

Thank you all for stopping by.....

hugsss and love to all

Happy Holidays

Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

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