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Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

0 posted 2006-12-04 06:04 PM

One of me danced
under the midnighht moon
while one of me dreamt
that I was dancing with you
One of me ate King Crab at noon
while one of me went fishing
for King Crab with you
One of me won
and one of me lost
one of me gave up
after figuring the cost
One of me is still trying
to get it right
while one of me will never
give up the fight
One of me still hurts
and one of me is healed
One of me still wishes
that our love was sealed
One of me still cries
and one of me still laughs
and one of me is still waiting
far away with the Daffs
one of me was crowned
and one of me passed it down
But the one that is me ain't waiting around

kingsangel

[This message has been edited by Angel4aKing (12-04-2006 11:55 PM).]

stevepoet
Junior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 46

1 posted 2006-12-04 06:09 PM

very nice.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2006-12-04 06:37 PM

ms jul, kewl duet (grin)

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

3 posted 2006-12-05 01:39 PM

Steve...thanks for reading

Dark....wanna dance???

kingsangel

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2006-12-05 10:59 PM

Julie I like this - it has a nice flow to it and it does indeed make me want to dance!

RDB

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

5 posted 2006-12-06 01:24 AM

RDB...thank you...the first fermata I read was in the New Yorker magazine....they are fun but hard....

kingsangel

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

6 posted 2006-12-06 10:02 AM

This write definitely made me pause longer than usual

By the way, how many of you are there?

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2006-12-06 12:39 PM

this is really neat!
I love it!

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

8 posted 2006-12-06 12:52 PM

Interloper....I never counted hold on...ok I counted 19 in this poem....

P.S....will the real slim shady please stand UP!!!!

kingsangel

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

9 posted 2006-12-06 02:54 PM

Great Job. Nice poem. Thank you for sharing it!!!``

Poetry is just the evidence of life.
If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash. "
Leon Cohen~

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

10 posted 2006-12-06 03:14 PM

Thanks again.....I always enjoy your poetry as well

kingsangel

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