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I'm Just A Girl.....
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I'm Just A Girl..... |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia 
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I’m just a girl With lust in her eyes You’re just a boy With a head full of lies We look We touch We feel We see We both know It’s never going to be But living on the edge Is better than the loneliness That envelopes me |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I guess we're nothing without our dreams but living on the edge teaches us to ... "balance"! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
thank you Honeybunch .... I agree, it's all in the balance... if men could leave their egos at the door then balance would reign I think!  Be well Roniece |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms B, the justice of just a...enjoyed this piece of you |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Excellent ‘write’!......... this is another fine example of what I call slice of “every-person’s” life dejavu. Although to “if men could leave their egos at the door”, I must respond that I have never entered any potential relationship with said ‘ego’, nor ‘a head full of lies".. but, in my past at least, it has never made any difference..it has been my experience that the clichés (as much as I detest them) are ‘oft true….’nice guys’ do finish last in life and love. I believe many (most?) women are at least subconsciously ‘deeply attracted’ to the ‘bad boys’ (who so often are ‘self-involved’ and sometimes down right cruel and/or evil). |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"You’re just a boy With a head full of lies" Perhaps they were simply truths that had not yet flowered? *grin* |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I enjoyed your thoughts Roniece. And also agree with icebox's comments. Sometimes men/boys don't give their good thoughts enough time to blossom and throw caution to the wind. Patience truly is a virtue. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I relate! well done! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oooh perhaps I've been a bit 'harsh' on "boy's" and their 'egos' comments!! Didn't meean to offend... but hey, at least I got some of the good looking ones to respond! Thanks again for your comments, enjoy reading them. Be well Roniece |
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twinkyfl1 Member
since 2006-12-15
Posts 133florida |
Oh God, I love this. Write another please. To thy own self be true |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Dearest RDB... Some of 'Us' have a softer side that keeps the Ego in check... but many of 'us' prefer the safe sanctity of the shadow... It is up to you, lovely women who deserve and expect more, to gently pull 'us' into the sunshine occasionally... and sip a taste of fine soulful wine. I enjoy your works that provoke much thought and feelings... Write on Milady, Write on. MoonShadow |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
But living on the edge Is better than the loneliness That envelopes me indeed...nicely written |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Roniece, With a needle thimble and thread you have stiched the bare in my head. Well done |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 understood. *wistfully remembers* "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
Dont worry sweets; if you slip off the edge I will catch you. Well done (; |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
sometimes, Roniece "living on the edge" is the best way falling in can hurt outstanding! |
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DreamerSpirit Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 240Buenos Aires, Argentina |
WOW!!!--just that..i really liked this one a lot..it's just excellent...one of the best i've read for sure! Good Work! Denis. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
thank you all!...your comments are lovely! RDB |
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