Open Poetry #39 |
Of the nightride |
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Outside looking in the sycamore - in remiss of her blooms she cradles the window stretching her branches forming the curtains where 2 in the mattress lay, we fill in the blanks our contortionist bodies mimic the mother tree as she twists in her nakedness we are dots on the vastness with the train in the background playing jazz in the picture the chant of its whistle etching sound to our rendevous i fall limp in your arms lustfilled and sleepyeyed blessed and sobered as moments so transient fade with sounds of the nightride. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (11-29-2006 06:47 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms inky, makes me want to be a window, enjoyed it |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Enjoyed Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
our contortionist bodies mimic the mother tree as she twists in her nakedness the entire poem was enchanting...well done |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I went to highlight the lines I liked but see Lee beat me to it. Funny how all of nature's creatures do similar things, and we seldom notice. Glad you did, and nice to read again. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderful, dear Michele, your poem shows so eloquently your knowing of the connection of all life and the poetic rendering is as always of high level. Love, Margherita |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
You are a wonderful writer Michelle. This one is excellent in it's creativity and bold, beautiful verse. TD |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for reading me and taking the nightride |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
the image is captivating ... well done! Ct |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
captivating indeed....this is lovely Mish!! |
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tek Junior Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 32Austin, USA |
very well done. i like your style and the way you handled the subject. excellent. |
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