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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2006-11-20 11:03 AM

Here's one I wrote for a workshop and shortly after I posted it, the site disappeared...sooooo,
I had no critique on it.

A Grizzly Moment

salmon leap
salmon spawn
salmon swim
from dusk ‘til dawn

salmon glimmer
beneath the waves
salmon shimmer
entice my craves

they flit in eddies
leap for flies
evade my grasp,
that’s no surprise

yet when I’m quick
with grizzly skill
I show my worth
and reach my fill

plump and sated
I head for rest
clutch their flavor
to my breast

sleep deep and heavy
through winter’s grip
dreaming the thaw
through slumber’s trip

my coat’s sufficient
it girds me well
hibernation’s simple
with hunger’s quell

©October 14, 2006
Virginia Salter

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

1 posted 2006-11-20 11:59 AM

Well, I like it

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Pressie
Member

since 2006-11-14

Posts 157
Oklahoma

2 posted 2006-11-20 12:55 PM

"salmon glimmer
beneath the waves
salmon shimmer
entice my craves

they flit in eddies
leap for flies
evade my grasp,
that’s no surprise"

Well done Virginia!

I can see the big fellow now, with that trophy in his mouth.

Omnia vincit amor

TP

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2006-11-20 01:04 PM

Very nicely done!
Virginia you have been missed!
Welcome home hugs, Nancy

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2006-11-20 01:08 PM

Hmmm, it appears that you must be part Grizzly bear! ~ for you certainly seem to know what it is like to be one!

This was fantastic, VAS! So good to be reading your poetry again! I had begun to think you disappeared into the Oregon mist!

This was a delightful read!

Giving you a warm, autumnal hug,
EA

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2006-11-20 01:27 PM

Thank you all for your encouraging comments and your welcome hugs! It's good to be read again, as well. Thanks Pressie for the specific comment; it's helpful to know when certain parts strike the reader, too.

EA, I'm probably too far east in Oregon to be lost in the Oregon mist...;o} However, if I get to head to my daughter's, the Washington mist might try to mess with me over the Thanksgiving holiday.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2006-11-20 03:37 PM

Virginia....I'm so glad to see your name back here!! Wild enchanting life, isn't it?

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

7 posted 2006-11-20 03:53 PM

Hmm, guess who's having salmon tonight? You've enticed my appetite, lol.

Yes it's me...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2006-11-20 08:32 PM

I'm glad you are back

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