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she knows (charcoal man and his lady)
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she knows (charcoal man and his lady) |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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lady knows before she knows hears it in thunder in rain it rustles through canebrake and thicket settles over house catfish gumbo bubblin’ hot hushpuppies fried up crisp coffee with chicory makes smell like home lady passes mop knowin’ sneaks behind catches her in mous of breast wraps breathing in stop she sits wet floor tears rain sweated hair half moon fingers clutched to fists beat on knees lady whispers mère sainte peu de fleur didn’t I pray? didn’t I kneel? didn’t I tell my beads? she wails oh god co faire? why? lady knows before she knows charcoal man ain’ comin’ home this night |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Brava, Kate! These are so good! *hugs*...jo |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you jo... hugs to you |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I cried with her. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You displayed her senses and her pain very well. Very well. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ladyone...she got ink on his soul skin when she did her heartspeak tattoo..like hook in the fishy worm, his demon will hear her pray songs and bring her home the soothskin soot..she is lovely in this fragile gown |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
So enjoying this series! excellent! ~Sunkissed. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
felt the thunder rollin through ladies belly aching, tears like river rain and pain from lonely sounds and wish I could tell the lady that after every storm, the sun does shine again. So beautiful this is Kate,  |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Oh! I know how lady feels! This is just perfectly penned! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you for your tears aziza…  thank you Karilea… Stranger an out of control lady is so appealing I see you want him to come home to her but what of his shoofly ways? must he give them up? thank you Sunkissed… thank you Gentle Spirit I hope the sun shines on his face for her… thank you Sandra I’m glad you like it… |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Some wonderful imagery in this write. A real pleasure to read. Nicely done. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Steve... [This message has been edited by The Lady (09-12-2006 02:33 PM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
maybe this man of heated wood needs to start feeling an old fashion emotion of jealousy in a rival |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
he definitely needs to feel something Helen that might do the trick… thank you |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
Dang!!! Did I get them all now? I will have to re read all these in order now for continuity's sake. This is so good. PS.... my heart aches for her... I know how she feels. Been there, done that, bought the t-shirt and the keyring. Sherry |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
oops Sherrythis is only the last few this series began a long time ago thank you for reading... |
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Spike Daft Junior Member
since 2006-09-12
Posts 23CA, USA |
Another gem... I am very impressed with and enjoying this series! Grey Matter Custom Images |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Spike Daft... |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
you pen the picture so well you can feel the character's anxiety; masterfully done, TL! misc |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
you pen the picture so well the reader can feel the character's anxiety; masterfully done, TL! misc |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you so much misc... |
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amberhues Member
since 2006-11-01
Posts 93 |
You have an outstanding talent. I will be anxiously waiting to read more from you. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kate, you have dis Cajun thang in ur skin... deep...and he is coming....soon. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Thank you for your kind comment amberhues you’re so right Barry this Cajun thang goes clear to da bone I’s just thinkin’ ‘bout these folks tonight wonderin’ how they been may have to peek in they window |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
1derful write  Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I like to believe that he could hear her when she needed him the most. He loved her and I don't think he would want her in that much pain. He just couldn't stay. It wasn't his way and maybe he hurt because of that too. A |
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