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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: Waiting My arms extend in patient wait In mental thoughts anticipate Yet phantoms of these qualms of task Are passing up my arms of ask Those magic spirits mists of seem Extrapolating every dream Turning some finality Into some reality And though I bow to nonsexist They pass me by in sore resist And will not take me by the hand And this I do not understand I offer up my treasures trove For it to stay a gardens grove But nay they close the door on me And cast me out on Sorrows Sea And though the diamond stars are bright They are too far this Eden’s light |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Patience, poet, Patience... all good things come to them that write...    |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Very cute dear sunshine.  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I say knock the door down! Well done, Sy  Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Interloper Good idea, thank you. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hold those arms up again Sy, and I'll hug you! Most excellent morning write. Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nancy, And you are so huggable.  |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Kind Sir, they can not take your hand, for we are holding the other and will not let you go. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
While waiting, you LIVE and LOVE and share your wonderful poetry ... and the stars and Eden are very tangible right there in your heart for all to see. Beautiful. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
inot2B Could I ask for a better answer? Margherita Love and hugs back, thank you my dear. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
what? you don't like our hugs Sir Sy? you looking someplace else? |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
As per usual pursuant to Seymour’s poetry, in addition to this fine ‘write’ as a whole.... I will hugely enjoy thinking about specific couplets for a VERY long time!...such as: “Those magic spirits mists of seem Extrapolating every dream”.... Is that truly grand or what?!! Or: “Yet phantoms of these qualms of task Are passing up my arms of ask.... Let alone the power generated when the two couplets above are slammed together!.....amazing!!...I'm most assuredly impressed! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
LOL @ Loper |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady No I want yours and everything else I can comprehend. secondhanddreampoet And I am impressed with your comprehension and selections. passing, Yet you never pass me by. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Wonderful write Sy. I especially liked "Loper's" comment! Knock the door down! TD |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ThisDiamond I am pounding on the door now. |
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