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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2006-11-09 10:50 PM

Flying north in the winter, against the season.
Gentle as a kiss upon a tear.
Flying north in the winter, amongst the reason.
Gentle as a hug upon a fear.

Flying north to the heavens,
looking down on earth, saying one tearful last goodbye.
Flying north to the heavens,
home at last, home of your heart.

Flying north in the winter, against the season.
Gentle as the wings of time.
Flying north in the winter, amongst the reason.
Gentle as destiny in a vision.

Flying north to the heavens,
arms open wide, embracing your king.
Flying north to the heavens,
sing, home at last carried away by the wings of a hummingbird.

Flying north in the winter, against the season.
Gentle as a kiss upon a tear.
Flying north to the heavens. Home at last, Home sweet home. At Last.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2006-11-12 08:12 AM

Kellie~
I am so sorry to hear about your grandmother's passing ... this is a lovely tribute to her, sweetie~

You and your family are in my prayers~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Brian James
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since 2005-06-26

Posts 147
Winnipeg

2 posted 2006-11-12 08:35 AM

This is a very good poem. I love the variety in your use of similie, and how you allow it to become thematic. This poem's overall conception is quite original, and the style you've chosen---a kind of free-verse/rhyme admixture works to enhance the poem without obviously restricting you in any way. It seems like you've given yourself a very general idea of what you wanted to write and set out upon it fluidly and casually. The result is a poem that manages to be stylistic and sincere at the same time.

I hope giving such technical commentary on such a heartfelt poem isn't at all inappropriate. I'm just really captivated by the way in which you wrote this poem. Very nice work, Kellie. It makes me wish I'd read more of your poetry in the past.

Take care.

Brian

"To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form."
~Robert Frost

Brian James
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since 2005-06-26

Posts 147
Winnipeg

3 posted 2006-11-12 08:37 AM

This also gets to be the fifth poem in my private library!

"To me, the thing that art does for life is to clean it, to strip it to form."
~Robert Frost

Brian James
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since 2005-06-26

Posts 147
Winnipeg

4 posted 2006-11-12 08:37 AM

Whoops, missed the button. Here's another reply for you!

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

5 posted 2006-11-12 09:08 AM

Adding to my library. If this is a tribute, whoever it is tributed to will be honored.

My grandma died a couple of years ago, but I never could find the right words to express how I feel. Your poems says it perfectly.

Brilliant

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2006-11-12 11:47 AM

I'm so sorry for your loss Kellie.
This is a wonderful tribute.

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2006-11-12 11:52 AM

beautiful gift you have created here Kellie

I'm sorry for your loss, my friend

sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

8 posted 2006-11-12 03:10 PM

Kellie, this is a magnificent tribute to your grandmother. I wrote my first poem when my grandmother passed away.

God bless you and yours,
Rae

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2006-11-12 06:32 PM

Gentle as a hug upon a fear.

~*~

THIS line, encompasses so much...

and holds even more.

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

10 posted 2006-11-12 09:51 PM

Kellie,
Nicely done. I know you'll miss her but this is your chance to carry on her memory and her legacy. Peace.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

11 posted 2006-11-14 06:58 AM

a beautiful tribute to your grandma - know she is dancing with the angels and looking out for you.

Be well
Roniece

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

12 posted 2006-11-14 02:51 PM

Kellie....I'm so sorry to hear about your grandmother...you'll be in my prayers, ok? And this poem was just beautiful....you did your grandma proud. Very well done.

sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

13 posted 2006-11-14 06:00 PM

This is a very beautiful poem to accompany your grandmother's soul up to the heavens.

She surely cherishes it.

Love,
Margherita

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

14 posted 2006-11-15 12:23 PM

Thank You all for your thoughts and prayers. It's taken me a few days to fully comphrehend the loss that has hit this family. I am going to miss her abundantly just as I have loved her and she has loved me. I look forward to when I can meet her again, on the other side of the pearly gates.

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