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Open Poetry #39

LukeatNFFC
Junior Member

since 2003-07-09

Posts 42
Nottingham, England

0 posted 2006-11-12 08:21 PM

I’m an unpleasant person
So I am told;
First, a manipulative liar,
Second, socially dire,
Often coarse and sometimes cold
The screaming maniac
Lo and Behold!
Who laughs at death and treachery

But in my castle,
Upon my hill
Where evil plans are hatched,
I sit alone,
Upon my throne
And my beating heart
(The one of stone)
Drowns in silent sorrow

Because tonight,
I dream of tomorrow –
The love I’ll bring,
To you I’ll sing,
And away is washed
My sorrow,
For the kiss
I hope to borrow…
…For your sweet love…
…Here…
…Tomorrow.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2006-11-12 09:01 PM

Hey Luke,
I have another friend in Nottingham who also writes poetry but writes in the way of rhyme. Perhaps you should get together. You have an interesting rhythm but I like your style.

Cheers
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

2 posted 2006-11-13 12:07 PM

I enjoyed this

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Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

3 posted 2006-11-13 12:40 PM

I liked this...nicely written

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-11-13 07:34 AM

wonderful theme!

LukeatNFFC
Junior Member

since 2003-07-09

Posts 42
Nottingham, England

5 posted 2006-11-13 12:06 PM

Thanks - I felt maybe the last few lines didn't quite fit, and I must also apologise for posting this in the wrong forum. I expect teen poetry would have been apt.

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