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gypsyheartx Member
since 2006-02-09
Posts 104Istanbul-Turkey/U.S.-Maryland 
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~ Just playing around with some sentence structures and stuff  ~Turning on the light, I noticed the drummer Pinned on the floor of the garage; I stepped to his rescue; Offered him a hand to get up; Considered Hands, Arms, Legs, Bones, Pride; Made sure he could find his way out of the dark. Lack of holding; Lack of hearing; Lack of helping; to begin to understand, I had shaken my inhibition and Bruised my heart. The less focused The less rude The less moved I am, The less prepared I’ll be. The sky was vanquished, The stars secluded By the light of the moon They were swallowed. |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
this was so cool..not structured but with a structured purpose..wonderful and expressive......... |
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gypsyheartx Member
since 2006-02-09
Posts 104Istanbul-Turkey/U.S.-Maryland |
Thank you- every now and then I like to just write whatever comes to mind and see what it ends up as |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
This is purely fantastic, poetry as I love to read, and so wish I could compose. Those that feel it is easy to express thought and meter while not using a set form are not taking into consideration the fact that to do it is easy, to do it WELL is difficult. This is done extremely well. Super job, super write. Sandra |
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gypsyheartx Member
since 2006-02-09
Posts 104Istanbul-Turkey/U.S.-Maryland |
Thank you very much, "raw" poetry has always been my favorite to write since I can express myself in a more emotionally fluid way. Thanks again ~Miranda~ |
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