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DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

0 posted 2006-10-18 06:20 PM

Thanks to all those who have been reading my poems and have replied so warmly...

Here we go,

Losing my life

I'm losing my faith
and i can't find a eway
to recover some of it

i'm losing my heart
and now i'm not entirely sure
if you'll come back

i'm losing my love
and now i need to call you
to see if you can give me some
if you still have any love for me

i call but there's no reply
i lost the sense of time
if only i could recover
all the things i lost
i'd smile and run to you

i'm losing my mind
and i no longer remember
our last night, our last kiss
all i remember
is your voice

now i need to call you
to see if you can
prevent me from forgetting your voice

i call but there's no rely
i lost the sense of time
all seems so long ago

if only i could run and find you
like i used to do
i would
if only i could fall asleep and start again
by your side
i would
easy my mind
my love
'cause this never made much sense
to me
'cause i just want
to hear you
again

william foos
Member

since 2006-09-13

Posts 77
schenectady,new york,usa

1 posted 2006-10-18 06:39 PM

i find it to be a great write but what is a eway let me know keep doing well
love the papa

i see what i write and write what i see

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

2 posted 2006-10-18 06:45 PM

Apologize for the mistake there William, it's WAY not EWAY...i don't know what's the matter either with the keyboard or me typing.
Sorry..

Denis.

JLHunter
Senior Member

since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

3 posted 2006-10-19 09:01 AM

Hi, Denis.

This write was full of longing and loss. It was spare, but it had all that I could have wanted. Great write.

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2006-10-19 03:28 PM

Losing your faith, heart, and love, certainly would feel like you are losing your life!
Oh, this was so wistfully sad and emotive.

You drew me into your moments of sadness and longing.

Loving Light,

EA

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

5 posted 2006-10-19 03:43 PM

Welcome.

This piece is well written, you have a lot to be proud of. Cheers - Ed

Once you are truly insane, it’s all picnics with Kafka after that. See, it’s the process of going crazy that you gotta worry about.

Sarkany
Junior Member

since 2006-10-14

Posts 32

6 posted 2006-10-19 09:51 PM

Hi

Thank you all for the inthusiastic replies

Sarkany

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

7 posted 2006-10-19 11:58 PM

Hi there peoplee...
thanks for the warm replies..makes me feel great..and gives me that 'something' needed to keep posting.
Thanks all
Denis.

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