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The Darkness Hides My Pain
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The Darkness Hides My Pain |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
The Darkness Hides My Pain The sun insinuates itself between my nights, A traceless journey from which I have departed; It chases away the stars’ ephemeral flights, ‘Til broken patterns regress to where I started. ‘Tis treason to complain about the sun so bright, Yet I lament the loss of dark that covers pain. My soul does oscillate between the day and night; Dark allows license to cry--tears an unseen stain. Their individuality is hid from sight, As your perfume reminds me how my heart was slain. Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"My soul does oscillate between the day and night; Dark allows license to cry--tears an unseen stain. Their individuality is hid from sight, As your perfume reminds me how my heart was slain." Wow! Such an ache to this John. That 'empty' feeling was evident in this write. Well done Sir...very well done! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
There was so much feeling here! (So very sad) Well done indeed. |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks again, Nancy. It was a very painful write. I was going back over some loneliness... John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Kira. Thank you for your nice comments. I do so enjoy it when someone "feels" what I did. Thanks again. John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
A scent can spiral back to a place we long to leave, but can enfold us in memories. This is so sad and so beautiful. Thank you -- I am enjoying your writing. Alison |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
John~ You opened with a killer line - 'The sun insinuates itself between my nights' -then polished it to perfection~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I sure know about the perfume/cologne thing God it hurts sometimes |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I agree about the first line killer and so is the last everything in between? perfect |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Alison. Yes, a scent can conjur up magical or devastating memories. I prefer magical...  Thank you so much for your kind comments. John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Marge. "You opened with a killer line...then polished it to perfection..." What a delightfully kind thing to say! I truly enjoy--and appreciate--your feedback. Love, John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, passing shadows. Yes, smells, especially when tied to romance, are tied to the most primitive (and emotional) areas of our minds...something to do with ancient survival instincts... Thanks for the sad words... *sniff* John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world! |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, TL. What a nice thing to say. Thanks for those nice comments! John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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