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Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2006-06-17 11:41 PM

she watches me,
from the corners of her eyes

anticipating

she winds herself up,
expecting a need
to tell more lies

for the truth is not real,
at best,
barely believable

I tell her it's OK
say what you must say,
not every path you walk
must be a closed street

she relaxes and lets go
of years of pent up fears

she allows herself
a moment of dignity
and self-respect

and suddenly
a smile appears
and you know she will
find a way
to move forward

Will Rhyme
Member

since 2006-05-22

Posts 149

1 posted 2006-06-17 11:44 PM

This seems very intense to me.

Perhaps, it is a poem about helping someone, even though you know their faults???

I dunno, just guessing, anyway, a great write....made me think...very well done!

Will

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2006-06-17 11:53 PM

thanks for reading, Will
and you are close...
though it isn't about fault(s)
but rather, the suffering
from years of abuse
and coverups
and the need to release

Will Rhyme
Member

since 2006-05-22

Posts 149

3 posted 2006-06-17 11:59 PM

Ahhh, I see, Good write!

Will

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2006-06-18 11:41 AM

Sometimes listening is enough to help release tension ...

Beautiful and REAL.

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2006-06-18 04:31 PM

I love this Kacy

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2006-06-18 04:55 PM

Good write, Kacy!

"she allows herself
a moment of dignity
and self-respect"

Yes, I think we should all do that more often because it's easy to forget in the rush of modern living.

latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

7 posted 2006-06-18 05:05 PM

Kacy, once again , You were there. best to you, martyjo

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

8 posted 2006-06-18 05:53 PM

Very well said Kacy...so right on point and
so in tune with the feelings of a person who
has endured so much.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2006-06-18 06:02 PM

She is very lucky she had you. Just wondering to myself how many people you have made smile! I know it will be a great many more than you know of. Lovely poem exquisitely and delicately fashioned. Much enjoyed. Thank you.

- Owl

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