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Gentle Breeze
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Gentle Breeze |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Gentle Breeze It seems that time has turned an inner dial Always the echo of some soft forgotten song Lifting the hem of my dress, as I hoped you would I thought of you, and ached to mold within your arms Enchanting, the visage of summer charms Found me spellbound in the pages of my own dreams Letting open the heart of me, letting in a giving sound Camelot does not exist beyond the mist of amethyst But this adoring state, this kind relate is why I journeyed To wear only promise for the hands of tenderness Then slipping down the sun from my shoulders To hold you in the valley of the woman I’ve become Copyright Kkh 6/17/06 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dpes the single word "WOW" say anything? Call the fire department...my hose just burst.... Dang, this is good. |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
This is really lovely. My favorite part: "Camelot does not exist beyond the mist of amethyst" Could there be the heart of a rhymer in there? |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is so lovely!  ~sky I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying.... |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Beautiful write. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
EXCELLENT write! You call it "gentle breeze", but its filled with pounding passion. Love, Margherita  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
KathleenKathleen~ 'this kind relate is why I journeyed To wear only promise for the hands of tenderness' I ADORE the all of this ... and that 'lifted hem' didn't escape notice either !!  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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calxaed Junior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 21North Lincolnshire, UK |
Really superb. It's got a lightness of touch and grace that makes me a bit jealous. I agree with Jess 'does not exist beyond the mist of amethyst' is a splendid use of assonance and sibilance. Beautifully done. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Oh! TD. This is the one I've been waiting for. Wow is right! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
My goodness, your words have fallen gently upon page... Patricia |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Absolutely beautiful! |
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ChaoticHazeLight Member
since 2006-06-13
Posts 71California, U.S. |
That was tight lol. I really like it. Made me think of my lady. - Haze |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
And your words fall gently on the reader - certainly a lovely write! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"Letting open the heart of me, letting in a giving sound Camelot does not exist beyond the mist of amethyst" So nice! Beautiful. JL  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my Kathleen.. Passion floated in on a gentle breeze. How besutiful this is. Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
stunning write It seems that time has turned an inner dial Always the echo of some soft forgotten song Lifting the hem of my dress, as I hoped you would I thought of you, and ached to mold within your arms that says it all, and most elegantly I might add... |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
This write left me spell-bound. It deserves a standing ovation. Thank you for the pleasure it brought to my mind. Huggs Kimberly |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Thank you all for your kind and encouraging words. TD |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Kathleen this poem works on several levers. It's a very passionate write. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Camelot does not exist beyond the mist of amethyst" oh, that is gorgeous! |
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