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happy days |
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perfect stranger Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 54on cloud 9 |
i woke up in a trance not knowing where i was what am i doing singing laughing i will have to pause i closed my eyes i was in a plane going over the sea everybody said whats going on i told them let me be next thing what did i see jack in the box coming after me humpty dumpty was next im going to fall of the wall and flatten you what have i done next came shaggy and scooby doo little bo peep came looking for her sheep over there burried burried really deep jingle bells jingle bells santas here glass of milk bit of shortbread oh a carrott for rudolph tom tom the pipers son tried to catch ali bali ali bali bee he was sitting on his mammies knee pied piper got rid of the rats he played music and made them flee its now 3-49am im really tired got to be up for 9am going shopping with just my husband and me up to glasgow [gallowgate]get the bus train get our lunch a few drinks and go hame then chucky doll will be waiting to get us,open the door go in quiet dont be heard or there will be a riot. |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
I like the idea behind this poem, while I could question the style and quality of the writing. So I am trying to be kind, yet I feel this poem has room for improvement The whole idea and the dream does paint a beautiful picture and the visions of this poem are great. a poet who cares |
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perfect stranger Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 54on cloud 9 |
poettothecars i am glad to hear any remarks about my poems im not long started so im glad to hear all comments,thanks for looking at poem. |
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