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Song of the Sea
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Song of the Sea |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
I was sailing along in a lavender haze When a gleaming pink pearl caught the suns rays I looked in the water and there to amaze Was a lovely young mermaid who captured my gaze All of a sudden, much to my shock The boat began shaking, it started to rock I closed fearful eyes and dreamt of the dock And drifted away for nearly a block I awoke to the mermaid stroking my cheek So enchanted was I, not a word could I speak I briefly recalled a boat with a leak And a mischievous mermaid who played hide and seek She said come with me and I reached for her hand Together we waded through dollars of sand Underwater was a kingdom of riches so grand That quickly dispelled were thoughts of dry land The mermaid bewitched me with her song of the sea I was under the spell of this soft melody There was never a maiden as lovely as she This siren whose voice had called unto me She brushed her silk strands with a sleek ivory comb With pearls on the handle pulled from the foam The sea had become the land I called home Each day as fresh as a saltwater poem Together we lived in a clam furnished hut Along purple cliffs whose edges did jut Though our life was a jewel, perfectly cut Something was wrong, I knew in my gut I was back on the boat watching the gleam Of a dazzling pink pearl that winked in the stream I was filled with a sadness because it did seem The mermaid who sang was only a dream So I sailed all my days in search of the key A siren whose voice had called unto me Hoping and praying one day it might be That I would once again hear, the song of the sea [This message has been edited by Jess (06-07-2006 07:36 PM).] |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Cute! Love the whimsy and the catchy ending! misce |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome aboard the pipTalk ship that sails these seas of blue!  A delightful debuting poem! I thoroughly enjoyed the rhythm, rhyme, images, and the story! Well done! ~ Enchanting and captivating! Warm, welcoming hug, Earth Angel  |
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Kimberly ann Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 61 |
you did a good job of describing it because i had a clear piture in my head!! good job |
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Troy Member
since 2006-06-04
Posts 52B.C. |
Shades of H.H.! A truly brilliant ballad. There are not many who can make it work as well as you have. To me it seems a metaphor between the riches of the unknown and of fantasy and the arrid reality one faces when waking up. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Jess, a beautiful poem, lovely imagery... you and she, beside the sea... Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a very special greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Jess, An absolute creation of imagination and rhyme! Both thumbs up! Terrific day to begin my day; (but heck, now I'll want to go swimming instead of work!) You meanie! It was a delight to read! miscellanea |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
amazingly written, enjoyable read, rythum and rhyme seamed the entire verbage together into a lovely story. Pleasure to read |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jess~ WELCOME to PiP ! This is an absolutely DELIGHTFUL ballad~ My favorite word-pearls ... 'Each day as fresh as a saltwater poem' Ah ... it will be a pleasure to read more from your ink~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS JESS! What a refreshing read and delightful ballad. I look forward to reading more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Enchanting!! Welcome to Passions, Jess! |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Yes, enchanting, and the odyssey sailors have pursued forever! Perhaps her name is Loreli...  Klassy |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
What an enchanting story! Yes, the mystic and magic of the sea calls to many. Welcome to Pip! Helen |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 what a fun read this is!I can see her...sitting there with her comb, getting the seaweed out of her long hair  welcome to pips, Jess |
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EmilySian Junior Member
since 2007-08-19
Posts 21England |
I liked this a lot. I could really conjure up the image in my head! |
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