Open Poetry #38 |
Behind The Veil |
Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Behind The Veil Before you there were others just as confident, smug, so sure they would understand. But, I’m not so easily saved made a slave to your carnal manhood. And if you only looked you would have seen the truth that you’re just another carbon copy of all the ones before. If only once you listened to the breath behind the words focusing on something more rather than fantasizing me in something less you would have claimed the best – my heart. If only you saw past the wanton ways you would have been within my skin, but it’s a sin when a man who’s only a boy wants the sex and not the soul of a woman. The glass slippers I wear for you have cracked because you can’t seem to take your stare off my chest or indulge in clever conversation without your shallow banter. Last I checked romance wasn’t a game of chance with every second or third word you pick up is changed to some sleazy innuendo in your favour. Behind the veil I let the real of me die for a love that’s never real. You only smell the scent of grass and lick the tempting tongue you only see the eager eyes the come hither on the other side. But, I’m just as much the fool. I am fraudulent fervor in the search and that’s why I give up. Melissa Long-Monette Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! [This message has been edited by Honeybee (06-04-2006 06:15 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
wow this fries ~to wait for one who feels the heartbeat not simply the heat~ |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
an interesting series of contrasts: the words not the breath sex not the soul the boy not the man the body rather than the heart And these contrasts lead the poet to see life as the disappointment, not the dream. This poem is nicely unified by its thematic consistentcy. Another good write, Melissa. |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Very nice poem, loved the title........paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"If only once you listened to the breath behind the words focusing on something more rather than fantasizing me in something less you would have claimed the best – my heart." Well done, Melissa! |
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