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Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2006-06-02 01:17 AM

The wooden table sits dull, the wood tarnished with age.
With books stacked three high upon the dirty glass.
The remote control slightly askew nearly falling off the edge.
A mug is sitting by its lonesome, a drip of its amber contents slides down its gleaming surface.
A light shadow lies against the murky pane of glass.
My leg extends across the gap, ancoring a bridge from the couch to the table, my toes looking up at the ceiling.
A quarter sits upon the wood glimmering in the light that shines from above.

Robert Edward Levin
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since 2006-06-01

Posts 45
can't remember. somewhere in midwest

1 posted 2006-06-02 06:54 AM

I really liked this. The simplicity made the setting.

R~

www.robertedwardlevin.com

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2006-06-02 08:06 AM

for me, this inspired a painting, in black and white...each and every detail of your words, painted exactly as you described it...

well done...now, would you mind, going and physically painting this marvelous poem, it would be stunning!!!!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2006-06-02 08:16 AM

sounds comfortable to me

Walter_Mitty_Esq
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since 2006-06-01

Posts 21

4 posted 2006-06-02 10:47 AM

Kellie,

I like this, but it's a little incomplete for me. I wish the table would become more animate... something to relate to.

Just a thought from a fellow student of the art. Keep up the good work,
Deep

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

5 posted 2006-06-02 12:52 PM

Vivid description....felt like I was in the living room, staring at the coffee table.

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2006-06-02 12:57 PM

Kellie_Cantrell
It felt like you were describing my table.
Enjoyed

XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member

since 2006-02-11

Posts 1403
Virginia

7 posted 2006-06-02 12:58 PM

::smiles::

:: bows ::

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

8 posted 2006-06-05 03:11 AM

Thank You for the kind replies. Walter I did a second piece to this poem it is located at /pip/Forum95/HTML/000163.html!

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