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what never came |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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We kissed twice within a bimonthly frame twice your eyes hammered blue upon my knees but air would never stir again, the trees mimicked coathangers playing dead in the aborted season, circumstance and happenstance suffocated budding branches and renewing glances, and you sting me now, with statements of "never meant to be" rambling off a theosaursus of etc.'s; so i catch your limp bouquet, echoing back at your own thrown up hands of our moment never claimed; a field of dandelions lay trampled on april wings, coughing feathers in the breeze, praying in its hospice, green to be taken by the rain. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (05-30-2006 09:19 AM).] |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
You wrote on weakness But everyone know's weakness But the one thing I feel you wrote Was another identity I accept the 3 limit, I dont produce someother identity Your words I seem to see too often in various guises You writing makes me think of several people and a Lady 'who works as the Sun' mentioned the habit Daved |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
o my what can i say? thank you i think |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
The dandelions "coughing feathers / in the breeze" is such an original look at a common event; then add the symbolic value of the trampled dandelions in contrast to the airborne seeds of the dandelion, and you get WOW. It's a great poem that leads the reader yet leaves room for interpretation. I am really impressed with this. I also have to comment on the "trees mimicked coathangers" and "the season aborted." The separation of "coathangers" and "aborted" by placing them in different stanzas makes the idea even more shocking when the reader unites them. This poem is loaded with powerful images. http://anthonyarmstrong.zoomshare.com |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My goodness, Goddess, you certainly know how to work that pen of yours! Creatively expressive emoting! ~ and a  btw It was HIS loss!!!  Linda  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I so enjoyed this poem but I seem to have gotten thrown off my thoughts of what I was going to say when I reached the reply section I do love your poetry! |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Yawn! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, powerful sentiment with equally impressive and unique imagery....I relate and am keeping this - you obviously say it much better than I ever could  Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Even nature is upset! Great imagery, Michele.......and....ouch. *hugs*....jo |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Michelle I had to save this one, and think it is my favorite of all you have written, that I personally have read. I refer to imagery like this usually as "Martieisms" but today taking your poetry to this level certainly made yours "Michelleisms" to keep! Beautiful imagery! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for stopping by and diggin the dandelions w/me |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
This flipping.... rocks! Ya know what I really mean, lol. Billy 8) "Only the dead, have seen the end of war." |
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