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Ada'Do'Lis'Do'Ti
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since 2006-07-04
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germany

0 posted 2006-08-26 04:44 PM


Can you hear the noise in my soul
The sound of the loniless in control
A sound so loud in drowns out everything
And can only be quited by silence death brings

Can you hear my heart cry out
Trying to overcome the noise all about
Sreaming to reach you and feel your return
Can you hear the sobbs feel the tears burn

Can you hear my mind trying to say
How much I love you, the loniless in the way
Trying to reach you with a spoken word
Only to wonder if it was ever heard

Can You Hear me when I say I love you.....


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sandgrain
Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA
1 posted 2006-08-26 05:02 PM


So well you depicted the soul crying out to an unhearing heart.  I think we've all wondered at times if one can possibly know how much we love them.

     Rae

riaz
New Member
since 2006-08-14
Posts 6

2 posted 2006-08-28 07:18 AM


Very true words, strong passionate feelings concisely captured...I believe this makes for a wonderful read...short, powerful, imaginative and vivid.  Brilliant
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