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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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park the women walk in threes and twos their hands at ease a man with a dog the almost random punch and whistle from soccer beyond a hedge there she falls, running windmill with a kite marks her hands no one comes noise like a fan somewhere off scent of sausage oregano she walks back on the string quick step in threes and twos pinks over blues posing without cameras a shimmer of random trees concrete table the man stops there his feet dangle like swings strides on the string, resolute ball high behind the hedge with backspin sidespin, curving they pass by in threes, twos taller than the kite she tugs it upright starts again a lunch wagon, its melody yellow kite, pinks over blues at ease, their laughter her hair in the breeze, running dog follows; the man whistes traffic sound, kite paper sound and the birds, all rising close by, the tiny lake |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Nice stroll in the park! Well done. Thanks, e |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed? Is this my Mile Square ?  If so ... you would know that I have sat the edge of that 'tiny lake' ... so many years ago ... yet the memories encircle me still~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes.....that IS the very lake! BTW, did I ever mention that you're a darn good photographer? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
That is so neat! The descriptions tell the story, and leave me with the feel of having 'heard' an impressionist painting--the kind that paints the sunlight. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...Your poetic camera...keep it at ready..it is a good one! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I love how you wrote this. It's great writing. aziza |
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poettothecars Senior Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 1093New Zealand |
Almost as good as a walk in the park, without getting your feet wet, Expressive a poet who cares |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
A perfect snippet of an openminded observer. I really enjoyed this. Rae |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
It's been so long since I've been to a park or spent time near the water. I can feel the easy flow of summer in your poem and the currents of life running through it like an elixir. Lovely. Karen |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Man, did you ever paint...I felt like I was right there with them...Excellent job Ed... |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Ed, This was wonderful to come home to after an unduly long day at work. Thank you, thank you! I took a walk, yet neglected not my duties. You are a wonder! Sandra |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you for this most enjoyable walk. I'm inclined to just pick up on the "feel" of things and miss the actual details so thanks again! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I wish I could watch you just walking along... knowing your mind is taking snapshots, weaving seeming disparate scenes into a magnificent panorama. *S* But I can only applaud the results... and wait for the day your work is published. *S* Beautiful, beautiful!!!! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
excellent glad I caught it this time 'round... |
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